#182 Agent 10
Agent 10 by @KittyCat_books
What is a crack mirror? Do you mean crack in the mirror?
Italics for thoughts.
Dialogue wasn't formatted right. I'll tag you in a critique where I've explained to something else how to do it.
Tense jumps. Keep it all in the past.
Good characterisation with Agent 10 - I felt like you kept her reactions consistent.
Comma splices. Fix this with either a semi colon or full stop.
Commas before names.
Blond=male
Blonde=female
More description would have been nice.
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