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#182 Agent 10

Agent 10 by @KittyCat_books

What is a crack mirror? Do you mean crack in the mirror?

Italics for thoughts.

Dialogue wasn't formatted right. I'll tag you in a critique where I've explained to something else how to do it.

Tense jumps. Keep it all in the past.

Good characterisation with Agent 10 - I felt like you kept her reactions consistent.

Comma splices. Fix this with either a semi colon or full stop.

Commas before names.

Blond=male
Blonde=female

More description would have been nice.

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