Chaotic Nights by @MmTt11

Great start - it's almost half prose/half poetry, if you know what I mean. You're telling a story and it makes the whole thing more down to earth.

You had some irregular lines that were skipped (layout-wise). Were these deliberate?

I often found that the rhythm and metre of all the poems were the same (iambic pentameter mostly) which made it quite boring. Word-wise, it was beautiful.

It's/its.

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