Greaser Queen by @CrazyKatiexox

First place to start - dialogue. Okay, take a look at these examples.

"Morning," said Linda. Her lips split into a huge yawn. "Man, that mattress was comfy."

Notice how there's a comma before the dialogue tag? And that after the full stop there's a capital?

Here's another. Starting with action this time though.

Tom stirred his coffee lazily. "Well I go shopping for beds every year." He placed the spoon on the marble worktop. "Costs me a grand each time, they do."

Notice here how whenever there's an action, there's always a capital?

GROUND RULES:
Dialogue tag = comma + lower case
Action = full stop + capital

Hope this helps^

Nicely paced parts. The characterisation and descriptions were brilliant.

Like before, loving the old style.

Keep up the good work :)

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