#159 It Had To Be You
It Had To Be You by @chhavi4778
Chapters 3-5
I found parts kinda cliche. Like the whole locker thing.
I would use colloquial language. Please see my comments on that.
Thoughts in italics.
Commas before names.
Just one question mark will suffice XD.
Overall, a great continuation. Not much to pick up on! Well done :))
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