#135 Hunter's Shadow
Hunter's Shadow by @EmmaConnolly379
CHAPTERS 23-25
There was a slight confusion with commas but it was very minor.
Commas before names.
You still had comma splices but they were minor too.
Its/it's issue but I think it was accidental.
I would clarify who Victoria is since a lot of that last chapter revolved around her. Apart from that, all good!
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