Elemorts by @Muaaz-ics

Numbers spelled out in full look more formal. (I know I might be repeating things from previous reviews).

Great cliffhanger at the end of the chapter with the bank. It also reminded me of Harry Potter slightly.

I would have indicators to show where the pov has changed (from Jayrock to Zablaron). It was great that they finally got to meet in this chapter.

Overall, again, a great continuation. I personally don't think you need anymore critiques or reviews since everything is spot on!

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