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-JL

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Boook Title: Famous for Nothing
Author: guardianlovers
Critique made by: eunicornwithoutahorn

∞Title:

Famous For Nothing

- Your title is interesting and mysterious. When I first read it, a thought come in my head. Why did you choose this title? It really catches attention as it caught mine. But this could also be a weakness, on my other side of interpretation, it is confusing. For some people but this title surely is interesting. I didn't realize not until I discovered after reading the first part that a band is included. Then I said, that must be it.

∞Book Cover

- Your cover is simple but attractive. I like the combination of the fonts. Because of the guitar, there is a hint that it is something about music. And that is a great hint for those readers who look into covers before the description.

∞Blurb/Prologue

- Your descripting is amazing. No words to explain it. It seriously made me curious about the story. I am a fan of music, but music doesn't like me. The way you use your words is fascinating. It also breaks my heart when you said Janus choose his dream over Kara. It is truly heartbreaking.

∞Characterization

- You explained the characters very well. So far my favorite character is Oddity. Maybe because the way you show his affectionate brotherly love towards Kara reaches me. I don't have a brother since I am the eldest of four daughters in our family. I do wish to have a brother like Oddity, and that made me continue reading it. You give a reader a reason to continue reading your story. Thank you.

As for Kara, I sort of understand what she is feeling towards her father. My parents may not say it directly to me, but they surely don't want me to pursue the course I wanted because of some financial and indemand issues. At the first chapters I want to hit her very hard from forcing herself to a group who clearly don't want her. She is forcefully fitting herself in. But thanks to Justine, she finally stand up for herself and open her eyes on her fake friends wrongdoings.

Janus, well he is captivating. But I am not close to this character. I do understand that he has this issue between his father also about his music career. But it wasn't that clearly explained in the first five chapters. Looking forward to find about it.

∞Plot and Setting

- Your plot is unique in its own way. But the concept isn't. Its because there is a lot of other stories that is same on yours. But that doesn't mean you can't do anything about it to be unique. You just need to dig deeper to make your readers fall to your story. Like how you fall in love to your crush. I am sure you have a lot under your sleeves.

∞Narration and Dialouges

- I noticed that you are using a 3rd person point of view. Which is usually used in english novels. Well that is great, you really know how to use this point of view. You are good in it and keep it up.

I just noticed, it seems like you don't know how to use the words 'ng' and 'nang', it is a common mistake and I admit I used to get confuse by these two frequently. Just remember that 'ng' is used when the following word is started by a consonant while 'nang' is used if the following word is stared in vowels. There are few typographical errors, but just some revisions or proofreading will do.

∞Opinion as a READER
- As a reader, I do find your story entertaining and heartbreaking. Base it to the description you wrote, the curiosity that questions me, why did Janus need to choose? Who or what provokes him to make a decision between Kara and his dream? The moment those question circled in my mind, urge me to read your story. Not because I am critiquing you but because I have questions need to be answered. And that is your strength for pulling your readers to read your story. Thumbs up!