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-JL

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Book Title: Behind The Pages
Author: PinkShadow97
Critique made by: pranseyyaa

Feedback:

∞Title

First thing that came up inside my mind about the title was about an author. Well, readers at first look would think of it without even reading the blurb. From the word "behind", it talks about the background of those pages, it's reason, it's existence. I mostly see titles like this at masasabi kong "hmm another author-ish" story. Para sa'kin, the plot can be predicted by some pero hindi kasali ang ending. I'm not a type of reader that based my taste of reading sa title kaya I don't have much to say about this.

∞Bookcover

This is one of the things I'm looking forward to since this is the face of the book. I like the style of the cover because it actually portrays the real motive of the story, its sadness and sorrow. I'm an editor but not that professional, marunong lang talaga. And from my eyes, your editor has a great sense of detail. The tint of the cover looks dry that added a fantastic element in your story.

∞Blurb&Epilogue

The title says it all but not the characteristics of the main character. Sa description kasi, nalito ako. I'm not into deep sentence formation at ngayon nga ay nahihirapan pa ako sa tagalog. The pain was greatly explained at the blurb. Questions will start to pop up inside the head. "Ay what happened to her?" and started reading the story, mapupunta sila sa prologue. The way you described the feelings of the main character was fantastic tho I can't get myself to appreciate stories with heavy moods.

∞Characterization

Okay, sabi ko nga you described the main character with her pain sa prologue fantastically. The things came with the chapters I recently read. You played a good role na magiging matigas pa ang main character at first and to avoid any contact with romance with LJ. I think every part of the chapter sa story mo has a heavy feeling. Masyadong malas ang buhay ng main character and I can't handle her misfortunes at naaawa ako. You made her feel isolated yet gave her a chance by creating a character that would comfort her and be by her side. The pair of a broken-hearted girl and a boy, ready to heal her heart is common yet I have the doubt since the main character is persistent to move on. Nagdadalawang-isip ako kung talagang meron bang sila o wala. But overall, it's great.

∞Plot&Settings

I was surprised to know the setting was a poetry cafe at chapter one. Maganda kasi you decided to make a place of your own na special lang para sa mga characters mo. You even explained the details well sa bawat pagswitch nila ng setting. Tho nakulangan ako sa ibang chapters pero it was still great. Gaya nga nung sinabi ko, the plot can be predicted because of the character's role. Sino ba namang hindi mapapa open ang heart kung ang kasama mo ay handang magheal sa'yo? I didn't say that the ending would end up as 'sila' but I'm saying that the main character would eventually make the boy as one of the important peeps in her life. Idagdag mo pa ang angst sa buhay ng main character tapos nandyan ang lalaki para iligtas siya.

∞Narration&Dialogues

Napa-woah ako sa narration mo. To be honest, maganda ang style ng narration mo kasi hindi siya mabilis. Kumbaga, kompleto siya. An action na ma-iimagine talaga ng mga readers kapag binasa nila. The type of narration na hindi lang basta-basta na nakatayo ang main character and doing nothing. The thing is, hindi mo kailangan na idetalyado pa ang narration. It would mess the reader's mind mind lalo na kapag pinapatong-patong mo pa ang actions nila. Maganda yung dialogues kasi na-career mo ang aktwal na pagiging poet niya. Sabi nga nila na kung ano ang career ng character mo then show it to everyone na ganon nga siya. You did well!

Opinion as a READER

Nacucurious ako sa whole story kaya actually binasa ko talaga lahat ng parts ng story mo tbh. Malikot kasi masyado ang utak ko at na trigger ako sa blurb mo. Meron nga nakalagay na ang main character started writing because of her pain sa past niya pero tumigil na siya sa pagsusulat dahil sa sakit na nagcause sa present niya. After that, I was curious. Hindi nga din naka-state sa story ang about dito kaya mas na curious ako (or nabubulag na talaga ako huhu) Ano ba talaga ang prologue? Was it a story na tungkol sa ex niyang si Lance ata pangalan non or tungkol na yun sa story ni LJ? Isa pa, kung reader talaga ako, hindi ko bet yung nakakaiyak na stories pramis kasi I got enough from other people charot lang. Mabilis kasi akong mabored sa nga kwentong napupuno na lang ng iyakan at hinanakit. Actually, I even tried to write one and I'm really bad at it. Pasensya na talaga huhu. One thing about the ending. I don't really get why she kept everything sa sarili niya? Ganon na ba talaga siya natatakot para hindi man lang pagkatiwalaan ang lalaking nasa tabi niya lagi? Well, I think that's a yes kaso nakakabitin talaga. There's something sa ending that I'm really eager to find. Not the type na magkakasila ng LJ but something.. ewan ko ba. You still did a good job!