User : phan_my_man

Ideally Classic

Cover:

Personally, it's not very attractive and that it doesn't look professional, it would look much better if the cover was edited to cover the dimension of it. But the font and picture of it is rather interesting and something which is done well enough, all I would do is just resize it and it will do dine.

Summary:

It's an excerpt not a summary. But I would rather you keep part of it and elaborate on a the girl and a band, as the excerpt makes it feel lazy and the ending I would just cut off the part when you state you are bad at summaries. A summary needs to have the introduction of a character, with the hook and conflict. The has to be an important part of the story, and the characters must be kept to a minimum. Also, the conflict is what happens to the main character and the incident which starts the plot.

Plot:

The plot here seems to be at least quite different with Violet. As she seems to be a pop star who had gained fame, not just another random girl who goes to the concert and they fall in love. Which makes me interested in the story.

Also, I do like what you're doing with the story. Bur focus more on her life as an singer and her slow development and this would shine. Because it's quite different from the typical story based on their topic.

Characterization:

Violet—she's rather enthusiastic, a pretty good idol but I didn't get a feel of her voice. She doesn't have a voice, and is mostly just describing. I would suggest just thinking like her, so that her narration doesn't fall flat or people think she's a flat characters which can turn a lot of people off since the story is written in first person. 

Jude—seems like a rather responsible person, since pop stars would need to keep track of their time well. I don't know how did Violet think her immature, she's trying to drill into them to work their schedule no matter how bad it can be. Pop stars don't sleep a lot from time to time based on their schedules.
The characters here need to have clearer characterization as well as actions, dialogue on the other hand was fine and even easy to read and write.

Writing:

The writing itself is okay, just remember that there is a comma before every sentence ends. The writing itself is that there is quite a lot of dialogue which is used for exposition. But it works in this case, qs ir was being reported by a reporter who summarized their life and accomplishments which would make sense here more than others.

Overall rating: 6.5/10

Good luck writing future chapters. I enjoyed reading this, all I would recommend is editing parts of it. This story was different and quite refreshing here.

By : writingsomethingmt