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Empty Of Pain review

Cover:

The cover itself doesn't tell me anything and looks rather cluttered all together as a she. I would have preferred if it was edited and another image was used. This didn't look like a cover and more like a drawing with an image of it. I would just suggest that the cover be changed, it doesn't look appealing.

Summary:

The summary itself has been really interesting even though it's nothing more than words, but it still leaves a big impact on me and it does draw me in. The mysterious feeling around the story works here as the story here I’m going to expect is deep.

But other than that the unique style of the blurb it attracts my attention itself.

Plot:

The plot itself is intriguingly set up, as it slowly introduces how the world works which is the best gets the cake. And that a sexual toy is a toy bunny, it’s filled with plenty of dark themes and that I'm rooting for it to change.

As for the background of the story it begins from a very plausible point of view and starts from the current world issues with a great mention to whom it was. And the eventual backstory was narrated in such a way which intrigued me.

And that the history of how it came together has been one of most well explained with Leveret explaining it very well.

Characterization:

Leveret—I liked him as the character, his underdog nature and that he ended up becoming a rabbit, he gains my sympathy but at the same is still a strong character that still wants to survive even though he views it as a form of payment.

His mother does interest me as she seems to be just intriguing about having him out of pure jealousy. His character has been interesting to read as he is someone easily mistaken for a girl, and that he ends up becoming something like a plaything to them.

Louis—I did like him as well, at first he was a bully but mostly on the outside. What he did to Leveret was milder than what others did to him, but still cared for him.

Writing:

The narrative voice is very detailed and portrays the emotions of the characters particularly well, I could relate with her and it was shown instead of told. And her choices here were well related.

The writing itself isn't bad but the formatting is hard to follow, as the dialogue aren't spaced together sometime below or have them lumped together. I would prefer if it was split, and some of the paragraphs were arranged together.

Also, there were certain points where I was confused as to whether the main character was breaking the fourth wall or something. But it was through that chapter when the entire world had opened up and also explained the system very well.

But other than that the writing itself is rather interesting even though at certain points of the story I feel as though there was more telling than showing itself, and that there needs to be a little more on the description part.

But other than that, I enjoyed the story.

Rating: 7 out of 10

Good luck writing the future chapters.

By writingsomethingmt