Used : br8ndneweyes

Title : Painting Skylines

Cover:

The cover itself is rather nice and tells quite a lot about the story. It's focus being the boy and girl there works as it tells that the story itself is about romance. Also, the cover is simple and easy on the eyes.

Blurb:

The blurb itself is interesting with many places attracting my attention. And the opening quote itself suits the story.

Also there is quite a lot of exposition with very little about the centre plot of the story until the last paragraph which introduced the other main character.

I feel as though the first two paragraphs, a huge chunk of it can be omitted and worked into the story itself.

Plot:

The plot itself is slow moving, but at many points it was good. With the introduction being quite smooth and even interesting. The beginning and setting in the story was a breather, there isn't a lot of stories which are set on a shop. With their presence being explained well to catch my interest.

Also, for their slow introduction to each other, it makes a lot of sense. Renée not being a socializer and not wanting to embarrass herself.

Characterization:

One thing I have to commend you for is that all your characters are interesting, realistic and well fleshed out. None of them feel like they are in one dimension and the all of them can be mentioned before hand before making their appearances and some backstory is given on them. Also, none of them are stereotypes that aren't done well, and that for me is the best part of this story. As well as a great diverse cast, with Renée being part Japanese, was quite an addition to the storyline itself.

Reneé - is actually a pretty entertaining/main character. She is twenty four and sounds like one, and at the same time she seems father driven. As well as realistic, she is. At certain points, she didn't feel as though she's trying too hard. But she most definitely have her ups and downs with her line of work. Also, she is strong with her own flaws here and there. Which makes her more human and real, such as her need for solitude after work, which is completely understandable.

And that I enjoyed her backstory, for she seems to have went through many things. Which is just like life and makes her life seem more than just bed and roses.

Annalise -seems pretty interesting, she maybe the best friend but I don't feel that she is annoying or the more usual type I see. She seems to know what to do, and has a good friendship. Also, quite the plus for her is that she seems confident and quite well liked. The one thing that I parti liked about her is that she has dreams, goals and ambitions and wants to open a hotel. It adds another layer to her character and makes her more refreshing.

Devon- He was interesting as a character being an artist as well as deaf. I like him as he found a way not to having to answer questions concerning his disability or hearing them and that he can decipher what other people says.

Writing:

The writing itself is quite good. Grammar was smooth as well as the narration, it never read or sounded bland to me. Also a plus is that the way she narrated her entire work day was entertaining with the comments on it being rather interesting.

Also, at one point the moment when Reneé met Devon, it was more like an instant love scene. As after it she couldn't take her eyes off him. I would suggest also seeing the work for run on sentences, sometimes it takes a while paragraph.

Also, at certain points the paragraphs were long and hard to read. The general guideline for this is that a paragraph shouldn't exceed more than eight sentences as it would turn some readers off which are on mobile.

But the introduction had been very smooth and working her backstory along with other things into the narrative had been done well. I feel attached to Renée and find her completely relatable.

Rating: 9/10

I don't have a lot to comment on the story, as it is well edited, developed with great relatable characters here. Good luck with future chapters of it.

By : writingsomethingmt