Author: Stephanie0192

Title: Little pieces of stories 

The title fits a short story collection. It's actually a little poetic and I like it.

Cover: Not spectacular, but I can't point out anything wrong with it. It's simple and to the point. My only suggestion is to maybe add your name.

The simplicity is nice.

Story: Even if these are short stories, they still need to have a point. Your first at least doesn't. Where's the set up? The conflict? The resolution? Being slightly late is not a conflict.

Writing wise, you can improve. You don't punctuate dialogue tags correctly, you use said as a tag so often that it starts to become noticeable and your sentence structure is very basic and repetitve. You also have awkward word use which makes me think you might not be native.

Try varying sentence structure, using more reverse dialogue tags and use the proper punctuation. Also, add conflict to your stories.

Overall score: 6/10

By - Wimbug