UserName: DLBiranen

Title: A Chance For Love

The title is impressive and seems to fit according to the summary and the first few chapters.

Cover: The cover is not at all impressive. You have a good model and a background too. But the work is quite amateurish and I will suggest changing it.

Summary: The first impression about the book reading your blurb is- interesting. Except for traces of grammatical mistakes, the summary is very interesting. The idea of recreating an old fairytale in the wrappers of modernization is praiseworthy. The cliffhangers are also piquing and I find the summary working. But you can never tell when the exact chord will strike. Writing summary is always difficult but you have made it appreciable with all your efforts.

Story: I like your writing style. You have a good grip on grammar too. But don’t use textual language in the story. Words like ASAP are better in text messages only. The story delves into the main point right from the start. But there is dragging and you let Victoria think way too much. Though the pace is slow, the book is quite enjoyable. You have let Victoria’s character take shape by the slow pace. Just don’t make it too slow.

The thing that lacks is the chapter endings. They are very plain and abrupt. To keep your readers hooked you need better endings, usually with a cliffhanger. The dialogues are so less that I felt there are only descriptions in the story or it’s an article. Give some more dialogues to push the story forward. For example, Victoria acts too weird when she first meets that it doesn’t seem to fit her character. She overthinks and I don’t think people will stand and watch you thinking of heavens. And you just seem to forget the boy even exists in the scene.

The plot is engrossing and if you can chip off the unnecessary chunks of words, you can improve the story.

Rating: 7/10.

Good Luck! :)

By - HerSpectre