Author: Thegreyleo

Title: Blood ties

The title is interesting and fits a fantasy.

Cover: I get you made it yourself and it's a nice design, but I feel it's more fitting  for Gothic fantasy rather than high fantasy that this seems to be. Anyway, it's not off putting.

Summary: now this makes me run for the hills. Why? Horrible punctuation and nonsensical phrases that go on forever. And is it Jaxon or Jaxton? Because you might have misspelled your MC'S name.

Also, starting the summary with 'this story is about' screams beginner.

Fix the grammar in the blurb and try giving us more specific events that will happen in the book.

Story: I'll be honest with you. I almost quit after the prologue. That's right. After those two paragraphs. But I sucked it up and went further in, hoping that the chapters themselves are better.

They're not. You're use of punctuation is very bad and it makes the sentences have no sense. You switch between past and present tense constantly, you don't know how to use dialogue punctuation, you use caps lock.

In other words, your story is very hard to read. So hard that I couldn't focus on the plot, which actually seems interesting. 

Fix your grammar issues. They really damage your story.

Overall score: 5/10

By - Wimbug