User Name: malkiyahin

Title: Saving Summer

Cover: I like the cover. It has a positive vibe with it and relates to the plot. The text and the picture are perfect according to me.

Summary: I have mixed feelings about the summary. While the content of the summary at the beginning is impressive, it lost luster at the end. It has grammatical mistakes, which need immediate attention, especially that “your” and “you’re”. I would suggest you keep the last quote in the content part of the blurb. It is a good punch line like. The questions are good, but I still suggest a makeover.

Story: I did feel the beginning a cliché but it soon covered up when I delved deeper. For, except a huge load of grammatical mistakes, the book is an enjoyable read.

Now comes the serious parts. Your book has serious grammatical issues. Though this is a level 1 review, I have to be a bit straightforward. I noticed the following:

-There is a lot of tense mixtures. Decide the tense of your writing and then try to stay put to that.

-Always italicize the inner thoughts of the characters, even if it’s a first person POV.

-Put three dots in an ellipsis.

-Dialogues: Always segregate the dialogues and the reactions. I mean, the dialogues in your book are pretty confusing, because they got mixed up. One person’s dialogue went in another one’s actions and vice versa. Put a line gap and separate the dialogues.

-Punctuations: You have terrible punctuations. You have literally no question mark at the end of any interrogative sentence. Many commas, periods, and exclamations are either missing or in the wrong place. They help to convey a lot of emotions. Without them, the writing becomes very plain and illegible.

-There are a lot of inexistent words used. Try to sharpen your vocabulary. Especially, I noticed “uncomfortableness”, which doesn’t exist probably.

-Separate the Author Notes by Boldening or Italicizing them.

I wonder why the mother dances all of a sudden while instructing the girl to go to school. At some places, the writing becomes a little immature.

The book is not all bad. I totally appreciate how skillfully you have shown the inner struggles of the girl. Her emotions and feelings were perfectly captured. Her bittersweet relationship with the boy is also enjoyable. Though the technical part put me off, the emotional part did its usual charm and adhered me to the book. The characters are really beautifully characterized. Actually, the book is very much lovable if one can read in between the lines. The journey of friendship is very well structured by the boy. The boy’s support is an asset of this book.

Rating: 5/10. I want the book to reach heights, and sugary comments don’t help in that. This rate will help you rectify yourself. Your book has a fresh concept, fresh ideas, even good writing style. But the reason it lacks reads and votes, according to me, is your grammar and the poorly structured sentences throughout. Give it a good outlook, use the multimedia if needed. This review is not meant to put you off. But to help you grow. And if you’ve understood what I tried to say, you’ll start doing it.

Good Luck! J

 
By - HerSpectre