Author: --OneOfAKind--

Title: unbreak me

Your title is fine for a teen fiction. It promises an emotional story.

Cover: the cover is pretty and also fits the genre and the tone your title suggests.

Blurb: your blurb is way too long. Way too many rethorical questions, too much back story. The summary should be short and to the point. Three paragraphs are enough money one about Ellen, one about Parker and their issues and one about what we should expect from them. Questions would be enough at the end of the last paragraph and not a zillion of them.

You also use fragments in your blurb which make me a little wary of your writing.

Story: let's start with some good stuff. Your grammar is good for the most part. You do have some misused words and awkward prepositions, but it mostly flows well. Watch out for dialogue punctuation though because you use that incorrectly. 

Another big plus: your character voice. I actually enjoy being in Ellen's head most of the time. She's not sanctimonious or overly emo or oh so much better than everyone else.

The banter was also fun. I actually enjoyed it though in most teen fiction it makes me roll my eyes.

Here's the big minus though: it's incredibly cliche. I mean to the point I want to cringe. So far, I've seen nothing I haven't seen before. Antisocial girl with misunderstanding past, one best friend who likes gossip and is a little dizzy,  hot mysterious new guy who takes strange interest in the heroine... seen it all so many times.

Also, I don't feel like the story fits the blurb. It's much lighter  (not that I mind ) and Ellen doesn't seem broken at all.

My advice: add some originality to the setting and what happens in your first chapters to draw people in (though your high number of reads shows people like it anyway). Try to sink some of your own spirit into the story.

Best of luck.

Overall score: 7/10

By - Wimbug