Rating: 1

Grammar: D-

You guys... Please don't judge me for this, but it needs to be said.

This was by far one of the WORST books I've ever read. It was so bad, I couldn't finish it. Maybe it got better later on, but I just couldn't. Now, this may seem pretty harsh, but I'm going to say it how it is. I'm sure FlirtyUnicorn worked really hard on her story, but obviously, she didn't work hard enough.

Okay, I was writing little notes in a journal. Here, I'll put them below. The sentences are not complete but you guys will get what I'm saying.

Chapter 1- Lots of grammar mistakes. Needs heavy editing. Super random. Needs better introduction to all her feelings. Where did she find out he cheated on her? You can't just throw in that random fight. Also, she should be a hell of a lot more concerned about the fact that some random stranger can see her.

Chapter 2- His anger was so random. There was no build up. Needs better portrayal of a characters anger and emotions and better explanation as to why. Also, why didn't she just leave?

Chapter 3- When BEN comes, she's terrified then once he's gone, she's mad? Fucking ridiculous portrayal of a characters emotions. Also, shouldn't she be covered in blood if the guy was murdered right on top of her . . . . That's it, I'm done with this story.

And I ended it right there. I couldn't get further than that. No offense, but as long as you don't write a story like this, it should be good. Just don't do this. It was a terrible story.