AspiringDreamWriters
I've kind of faded my interest in this particular book,
to the point I just remade an account, but maybe with some of your criticism
I could try to fix it while getting it back on track!
Form: (btw, this was almost a year ago and written on a small phone so I am extremely aware of the grammar/spelling mistakes I didn't bother to fix. I hope you could voice a little more on my stories concept?)
Title: That Place In Our Hearts
Username: @itsforreals
Genre: Teen Fiction
Part: "I didn't know what to do. I couldn't think, couldn't breathe. I was dying, iwas sure of it. I felt my brain shatter and then I heard my scream. Then I hear rushed footsteps barge into my room. At least then the violence ended. But not mines, I became it. That's when I lost control. Not in the way most people would think, I would lose control mentally. But trust me it was scarier. I would not move—i couldn't move. I could not see, could not breathe, I couldn't feel anything. And that was when I died." - That Place In Our Hearts