Cloud Nine Reviews
Title of Story: Ephemeral Pleasures and Sorrows

Title: Having read it over and over, automatically you as a reader think of love, romance, and heavy affairs which is exciting and fitting to be paired with the story itself. The words ephemeral and pleasure may be overly used as stand-alone titles here on Wattpad but yours seems to be one of its own.

Cover: Although to me it is not the most eye-catching, the overall quality of the cover is good in that it is relevant and an appropriate image in relation to both the title and story. The cover goes well with the genre too as the people in the image strongly portray a combination of a romantic and lustful relationship.

Font size and style could use some work. I always use the contrast rule when working with text and covers. Previous reviews have several examples on how to make text pop!

Blurb: The blurb is a bit narrow, perhaps because the focus is on the previous life of the protagonist and does not reveal much about her romantic relationships. I think in order to establish that this is a novel driven by love and romance, the readers already need to get a very brief glimpse of what the main problem is and how things might take a turn when she encounters her partner and or lover/s.

Currently, she (the protagonist) is only introduced and we are given the idea of her struggles. However, none of the paragraphs relay information regarding her love life or social status. Consider writing a blurb expounding on this with a cliffhanger centered on her romantic dilemma.

Grammar: I believe you are well adept in writing in the language/s of your choice, therefore there is nothing much to be pointed out. Perhaps, avoid excessive use of dialogue.

Again, as I always advise, be on the lookout for simple grammatical errors that may be present in the story.

Plot: The plot I see is already exciting and substantial. You began enticing readers with a revelation and continued to spark the reader's interest as the story progressed. Based on the first few chapters, you know how to craft a scene well and make both dialogue and interaction of your characters interesting. 

What I think could be of further improvement is the build-up and detail within a scene. Let the story take time, there is no rush as long as action is always taking place. Also, allow room for transitions. Chapters may come off as exciting at the beginning but fall flat at the end if transitions are not well executed. Make readers wait for the drama, even for just a little while.

Last reminder!

dilagmakata tip #14: Be sensitive in rating your story.

Your writing is dramatic in a great way and although there is nothing wrong with including mature and explicit themes, be sure to rate them accordingly.

Kindly tag your story Mature as I do believe that the title and the story in itself does call for an audience of 18 and above.

Well, that's it for my short, blissful, and honest review on Ephemeral Pleasures and Sorrows. Don't forget to follow rule #3. And once again, thank you so much for allowing me to review your work!

"Love is nothing but lust misspelled."
-Dan Simmons

love always,
dilagmakata