Cloud Nine Reviews
Title of Story: Moon Child

Title: In my opinion, the title moon child was good for a catcher. Although I am aware there should be dozens with the same title, to me, it's the definition of the mantra connecting your protagonist to her circumstances that made it a suitable title for your story.

Cover: The cover was eye-catching as well, really vibrant, almost but not too flashy. Again, it's good to find that the the mantra aligned with the chosen cover image. The text size was readable enough.

dilagmakata tip #6: I am really not a pro graphic artist but it's a good rule of thumb to always contrast text color with the background color.

Title text was easily differentiated (A+ on that) but perhaps for the other text present you could use a lighter tint of pink if you'd like to contrast it with the background more. Also, I would still suggest enlarging the title a little. (always optional).

dilagmakata tip #7: Keep in mind that secondary text is only one straw less important than the title. Make it neatly visible too!

But let's not make it all overpowering alright.

Blurb: I think it was smart to begin with a question. It is a common and yet very strong approach to indirectly speak with the reader and catch his/her attention. It's good to note how the blurb presented the original character uniquely revealing hints of reference from the show.

In terms of the length of the blurb, it did not seem too much to take in as half of the text only consisted of story details.

Grammar: On a really positive note, grammar-wise I don't have much to say. Vocabulary seemed to come in natural.

dilagmakata tip #8: Stories do should be written naturally. Dictionaries exist for a reason.

Look, your character should not be looking for photosynthesis in her closet, because words, are not meant to glitter your work anyway.

Format-wise, only lapses were in sometimes separating dialogue into a different paragraph and maybe lessening a few dialogue tags!

Plot: I cross-referenced a bit and looked up the anime to get a clearer sense. I do sense that the romance kicked in a bit too quickly, however, the story rolled like a fantasy-teen fiction novel (a good cliche adds up) which I believe is a strength that appeals to similar readers and fellow otaku.

The pacing is smooth and the story was cut at the right moments. Needs a good polishing, but was an exciting read overall.

Well, that's it for my short, blissful, and honest review on Moon Child. Don't forget to follow rule #3. And once again, thank you so much for allowing me to review your work!

"Never apologise for being yourself."
-Paulo Coelho

love always,
dilagmakata