Author: @Youaremyrayoflight

Cover: I honestly don't understand your cover. All I see are blue paragraphs, something dark behind, and your title. What were you trying to convey? First off, a book cover does not need paragraphs scattered on it. You can simply add a line or two that flows with your title, hits the readers, and makes sense. Second off, make it clear. I know that its hard to make a high quality cover where the person can actually see it, so I'll let you off a bit. Third off, color scheme is very important. Your cover has this really light blue and then you have this dark brown in the background just staring at us. Fourth off, your name. I have seen many writers on Wattpad do this and I don't even blame them because if you look at some of my books, you'll notice I didn't even put my name on the cover. I know I should practice what I preach. But, its actually quite important. The color of the blue is so light, I could barely read your name. Try not to take this to heart seeing as I'm not a graphic designer and this is simply my opinion.

Title(3/5): I'm sorry to tell you, but its not unique at all. I understand the pain of trying to choose that perfect title and realizing that about a hundred other books have the same exact title as you. I'm not even kidding. I searched your book up and other books had the literal same exact title as you. Usually, when I figure out a title for my book, I search it up in the Wattpad search bar to see if there are others with the same title. You can also use Fantasygenerators.com and use it to generate different titles. While, the creator of the website does allow you to use it, I suggest using it only to inspire instead of using it outright.

Blurb(3/10): The blurb is no. Simply no. Usually, I try not to judge by length, but it's 22 words long and it doesn't give any background information. Yes, it's gripping, but if I was simply a reader, I would've turned away from your book. Try to add information about the characters and the plot itself. That way, the readers have a better idea than they already have of what your book is about. 

Mistake: And the bigger question is, Who will kill them?

Correction: And the bigger question is, who will kill them?(Make it a lowercase w.)

Yes, I saw the actual description inside the book, and I have seen many authors do it. I advise you to please don't do that. Why? Because, not all readers will be so inclined to actually click on your book and see the description that's inside.

Mistake: But how do he get those? 

Correction: But how does he get those?

Mistake: But most of the time there are no paranormal activites as such.

Correction: But, most of the time there are no paranormal activites.

Mistake: It would be the same this time right? Or wouldn't it be so?

Correction: It should be the same this time, right? Or would that not be the case?

Spelling/Grammar(10/15): I won't lie. Your blurb and book cover gave me a bad impression of your book, but it was surprisingly good. Your main thing was forgetting to add the word 'of' in a few places, and all in all for this one, I advise going through your book, re-reading it and editing it.

Creativity/Originality(15/20): I don't read many thriller books especially Wattpad thrillers, so I was unsure on how to grade this. I'm the type of person to read psychological thrillers, and the books that I've seen that contain cults never actually make sense. From your blurb, it says that the paranormal activites happen every 50 years, and I advise that you should've added something about cults in the actual description. In general, it sounds kind of plain. If it wasn't already clear, I'm judging it based on personal opinion since I don't read thrillers. Cult, detective, somebody dying. I'm truly sorry that I am not the best help on this, but maybe try adding a plot twist that the main character ends up beind the killer. 

Plot(15/25): For the plot, you started your first chapter out with a gloomy mood and the whole rainy, stormy mood. In my opinion, I think you could've started it off differently. Trick the reader by making it seem happy and make it darker and darker as you keep on going into the story. That way they stay hooked to the story and never want to drop it. 

Reader Enjoyment(13/25): I personally wasn't too big of a fan. As I've mentioned above, there's a lot that can be fixed. If you ever do fix it, message me and I'll write another review based on the edits.

Total: 59/100

[If you feel this review is too harsh or unfair, please message me.]