Author: AkoOku

Cover: Nothing came to mind. An idea didn't pop into my head upon seeing your cover. When it comes to covers, I naturally gravitate towards those that are either unique and stand out or visually appealing to me. I'm sorry to say this but all I saw was a girl walking on the road and while it may be unique it felt...bland? It felt as if it could've been more.

Title(4/5): While it does come up first when searched and has a nice ring to it, is there a way for you to somehow incorporate the amnesia into it? Like I've said in previous reviews, when it comes to book titles, try a name generator. See what comes up and let your gears start turning. But, the title for the most part sort of wraps up the whole book.

Blurb(7/10): Your blurb is nice, but my problem with it was the fact that I felt it could've been worded a bit differently. The beginning of it is strong and immediately hooks my attention. The last paragraphs of blurb felt... there. You included the sentence, "Weird, right?" It has no actual problem with it, but when I see this line it's like someone is speaking to me. That should be the aim in your whole blurb, but the rest of it like I've said above didn't really keep my attention.

Spelling/Grammar(13/15): You were fine on this but I occasionally did catch wrong word usage, and misspelled words. For this, I suggest going back to re-read and edit your chapter.

Creativity/Originality(18/20): I don't think I've seen any stories that includes living in a hostel. What I really liked was the fact that she had amnesia. Instead of it just being a normal story with normal good old drama (that I love), you spiced it up! The fact that she lost her memories makes me want to keep reading until she regains them.

Plot(17/25): You have an interesting idea, but the first chapter I assume was when Debbie was going to the hostel for the first time, correct? If so, I think you could've put in bolded words or italics whether this was her first time going to the hostel or not. This is simply a suggestion, because I got confused as always. Other than that, I truly don't have much to say.

Reader Enjoyment(18/25): I liked it for the most part. The little grammar errors did set me off a tad, but they are little. I especially enjoyed how you portrayed Nathan and Debbie's sibling relationship in the first chapter!

Total: 77/100

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