Title: Mystery Became Surprise
Genre: Fantasy
User: POETUNKNOWN1912

Cover/Title:
Although I do like the background of your cover, the title and everything else is impossible to read thoroughly. I think the font color is wrong, and to be honest, it doesn't stand out for me as a reader. I would suggest you find a better replacement or to change the writing because your cover is the first thing your readers will see, so your cover must represent the work inside. If you need help, just reach out, and we (mystical admin) will be happy to give you a hand.

I have no idea what's the connection between cover, or even the story is at this point, it slightly raises my curiosity.

Summary:
Your Summary isn't making you any favors if I have to be completely honest. Apart from from5 friends who found a book from the library isn't much mystery. I'm not tempted to read the book and telling your readers," Read the book to find out what happens" isn't helpful. Also, you are writing fantasy, so there no need to emphasize that everything it's fictional in your summary. And the way you decided to end your description would be enough to make me not to read any further.

The cover, title, and summary are the front door to your book; if you don't give enough reasons to new readers to even consider opening your book, the chances are that they won't.

I would highly recommend it for you to rethink your cover and make your summary more indulgent, mysterious, and more detailed. Write it in a way that there's no way anyone would even consider not reading it without you needing to tell them to.

Also, if you think your story deserves to keep going after you are done with this first one, then do it because you want to, not because your readers will shower you with "love"... Being a writer is so much more than that, and I'm sure you know this too, so just stand behind your work without being one of those people who throws a treat at readers just because they read the book.

No way I'm trying to sound too harsh, but I saw this over and over again, and readers deserve more, and you deserve more as well, so raise your bar and set an example :)

First impressions:
I noticed that your writing style isn't yet perfect but nothing major, you will get better with time without a doubt, and you can always find someone to edit, just to make it more flawless.

There weren't many descriptions about the surroundings, and that kind of left a lot of untouched territory in your book. Sometimes we are so focused on where the story is going that we forget to develop the plot in a more extensively way, and small little details get overlooked. Try not to rush and keep a good pace.

Character development
There isn't a lot of development in the first few chapters, but I need to base my opinion on what I've seen and I was lacking of personality in each character. The constant change of POVs can be tricky and make it hard for your readers to connect with the characters. So you really have to show their personality, beliefs and essence in a more complex way.

Plot
The plot has tremendous potential But it definitely needs to be developed a little more. Fantasy is such a different world when it comes to writing. You can use your creativity and express yourself in a wider range compared to to other genres, and you have room in your book to expand your creativity so much more. Your plot was moving a little too fast leaving so many chances to just develop it deeper. There's a lot of scenes that you could open doors to mystery, but I feel like there was a lot to be said and described, but instead it felt like you were rushing at some points.

Conclusion
I loved the concept of your book, I just wish that you could take it to another level by explore your storytelling a little bit more.

I would rate this book 3.4 out of 5

I apologize for any typos. Thank you for allowing us to review your book and we wish you and your bookie nothing but the very best💖
claudushka

Book star 3