Title: Destinies of the Azure Skies
Genre: Fantasy
User: Tamaki_Leon

Cover/Title & Summary:
Your cover is different from anything that I have ever seen in fantasy. It looks simple, yet it stands out in the crowd. The title and cover seem to combine perfectly.

Your description feels incomplete. And even though you gave it a little bit of suspense, I didn't really felt compelled to open your book, which is what your book's description should do to your readers. You don't need to give your plot away but indulge them a little bit more on what your book is all about while keeping the suspense.

First Impressions:
I really like it when a writer has an introduction or an author's note. Only because it gives your own touch to your boo, and it makes the journey of reading your book more enjoyable.

Plus, I think that release another version of your book with the original script is something that will add uniqueness to your story and, of course, reach out to more readers who are more into that style of reading. You care about what your readers think, and that's a quality to have as a writer, in my opinion, so congrats for being this awesome.

Your writing style is good; you were also able to describe surroundings and introduced the characters smoothly into the story. Although personally, I wanted to dive in into Fei's story just a little bit more.

As a suggestion, the way you start and especially when you end a chapter should leave an impact on your readers. The beginning of a chapter is supposed to grab your reader's attention, and the end of a chapter should raise their curiosity, which will make them look towards reading your next chapter. I think you could improve the engagement of your readers by working on those things.

Character Development:
Although you gave individual attention to your characters, there wasn't much of personality to each one of them. It seems like you stay too near the tr surface and don't go deep into their emotions.

The emotional side of your character is important because it helps your readers to relate and connect with your book.

In the dialogues, for example, you didn't expres how they felt , which is a huge opportunity for a writer to develop their personalities.

Plot:
I wasn't very sure about what the plot was about, to be honest. But I could sense the mystery in the air.

You left many unanswered questions along the way, which is a perfect thing, but at certain moments I wanted more.

Conclusion:
I think you set a challenge to yourself by changing the format of your book. I understand that maybe that's why I lacked a more profound development of the characters and the story itself. But I was able to see the work that you put into it, so that tells me that you are willing to put the work to make your book special.

Overall I think you did really well, and yeah, there are a few things that could be improved to intensify your reader's experience, but you can always go back and fix whatever you think it's best got your story. The most crucial part you already achieve... You wrote the book!

Reviewed by claudushka

I apologize for any typos. Thank you for allowing us to review your book. I hope I didn't offend you in any way. Remember that you are already an amazing writer. I'm just trying to help you to improve. In no way shape or form, I think I think that you are not an excellent writer. Feel free to reach out if you need anything else❤️

I would rate this book 4 out of 5

Book Star 4