Title: Breaking the Mafia Leader
Genre: Fantasy
User: snowcrystal-

Cover/Title:
I love your cover, it  calls for attention and it would definitely make me pick up your book. The title clearly says what your book is about and I think the title and cover blend well together.

Summary:
I did understand the meaning of your description, but I think it's miswritten, as well as having some grammatical mistakes. I would consider editing it, because your description it's a little peek of your book and you would want it to be perfect.

I also think that you are unveiling a lot of your plot away. It's always good to hold some of the mystery, so maybe raise some questions without giving up the answers?

First Impressions:
I could see some grammatical mistakes throughout the book, but nothing major, and it wouldn't stop me from reading it. I could connect with Stella from the very beginning. I think you portrayed her exceptionally well, and it was easy to relate to her.

You ended your chapter, leaving a slight mystery in the air, which makes your readers looking forward to the next update, although you can always intensify it and create epic cliffhangers (just a suggestion).

Character Development
You pursued Stella's character quite well, but I think you can go deeper in some scenes like I realize how you want to keep the mystery of who she is, but it's possible to break her wall as still leave your readers wondering.

Plot:
By the title and summary, I know that she will probably get involved with Xavier at some point, but don't really know how or when. I was actually interested in that...You have two strong characters that will clash, and the unknown past of Stella still leaves a lot of questions towards the plot. So I think you have a gem here!! I wanted more to be completely honest...

Although you need editing and loose up a few strings to make this story even magical, I see an epic story taking place. So don't hold back and keep writing!

I would rate this book 4 out of 5

I apologize for any typos. Thank you for allowing us to review your book and we wish you and your bookie nothing but the very best💖
claudushka

Star book 4