Time Shop by hyuntaenie

Title: The title is interesting. It makes me curious about the story.

Cover: The cover is so good. It's creative, it's relevant, a bit creepy and I love it.

Description/summary: I know you don't want to give much away in summary, but sometimes it might come off as too short. I'd have loved it if there were a bit more details into it.

Plot: It's a little confusing until the end of second chapter where you finally explain the whole time shop system. The concept is very interesting and so are the characters. For some reason, I like Valentine. I'm still not sure what's going on with Yoongi and that mysterious girl. Personally, I like the characters to have their own name as I never substitute Y/N as my actual name while reading any of the fics (I read it as why-enn in my mind).

Grammar and Punctuation: You have to work hard on grammar in this one. There are too many grammatical mistakes. I wasn't thrown off the storyline because of these errors, but it needs editing. I know you are capable and you can do it.

Overall feel and flow of book: This book is intriguing, mysterious and a bit creepy, in the best way. As much as I love your ideas, I think you need to focus on your writing. I've already pointed out about the repetition in the last review. You start the chapter and/or scenes really well, but sometimes they fall into the monotonous rhythm of he does this, then he does that. Don't be afraid of longer sentences, put them between your shorter ones. Other than that, I love the way the story is going on, nothing feels rushed. It has a lot of potential. I honestly can't wait to see how the afterlife of the main characters will turn out.

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hyuntaenie Please don't be disappointed if this review isn't what you were hoping for. This review is based upon first 4 chapters only, because of lack of time. Feel free to reach me if you have any queries. 💜💜💜 Thanks for signing up in my review shop!

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