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𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐖𝐈𝐍𝐍𝐄𝐑

Guardian Angel Assignment: Kim Namjoon

Author: @LAJoyner

Judge: @k00kiesandch0c0lates

Score: 73/80

Title: 5/5

The title is perfect. Nothing more, nothing less. It is unique and reflects the plot well. To be honest, I really love it.

Cover: 3/5

The picture of the cover is okay but could use something better. The problem is in the font. It's very simple and flat and isn't attractive at all. You could use any kind of calligraphic font to write "Guardian Angel Assignment" and a simple straight font for "Kim Namjoon" or could do vice versa. The template that you used is blue-green pastel, so basically, it's a soft colour, so you shouldn't use white color in it instead you could use dark colour such as black. The wrong colour of the font makes it harder to recognize the title. I hope you understand this.

Blurb: 4/5

The blurb is all well. I love that you mentioned the genre of the book at the beginning of the blurb. I didn't find any grammatical or punctuation issues in it. I just found only one mistake that's very minor. I saw you write "Kim Nam Joon" in the blurb, but you write "Kim Namjoon" everywhere in the book. So maybe it's a typing mistake. Also, I think if you give a sneak peek or a little description of the story, it'll look incredible.

Plot: 15/15

The plot is great. It's really unique. To be honest, I read a lot of paranormal or fantasy genre books, but it's my first time to read a book on guardian angels. The story is very interesting to the last point, and I'm looking forward to reading the further books of this series when I get time. I enjoyed every moment and every chapter of this book. I really have to appreciate this work.

Characters: 5/5

Nothing to say about the characters. Every character is perfect and well-defined. And I love each and everything of the characters. I also love your choice for the side characters. You chose Marvel characters too; it was a really nice and unique creation. It'll really be a mistake if I don't appreciate how you describe the natural flaws of the members and motivate them. If, coincidentally, one day any of the members read this, they'll really feel motivated.

Pacing: 4/5

The pacing is okay, though sometimes it feels like it's going a bit fast, like you could describe some more scenes of Ara and Namjoon. I think their bonding is very cute. But sadly, there aren't enough scenes of this couple.

Writing Style: 14/15

To be honest, I think your writing style is okay, but it could be better. There are some small mistakes too. When you write the chapter's name in capital, don't capitalize articles and prepositions. When you start another paragraph, sometimes I see there's an extra space before the first word of the first line. So, revise the chapters briefly and carefully, though it's not a major problem, but it decreases the look and standard of the writing. Other than that, some punctuation problems I found, and that's it. I love the method of distinguishing between the thought and the conversation. You used italic font for thoughts and normal font for conversation; it's totally my type. I love it.

Grammar & Punctuation: 9/10

Grammar is fine. I didn't find any grammatical mistakes, but there are some punctuation errors, like commas. There are some lines where I think commas should be put on. I also found some words that aren't there. Sometimes this happens, so revise your drafts carefully. Other than these two problems, I think everything is okay.

Vocabulary: 5/5

Your storage of vocabulary is just perfect. Nothing to say. It's perfect for the readers—not too complicated or too casual.

Overall Evaluation: 9/10

Everything is okay except for some problems, which I mentioned. Keep it up. Your plot and writing style are really very good. Though you've got some small issues, I hope you'll improve this quickly. To be exact, I really enjoyed reading your book.

Total: 73/80

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𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐑𝐔𝐍𝐍𝐄𝐑 𝐔𝐏

Echo in the Wind

Author: @strawberry1d

Judge: @k00kiesandch0c0lates

Score: 68/80

Title: 5/5

The title is really very good and well matched with the story. It has a very deep meaning, which you described perfectly in the story.

Cover: 4/5

The cover is okay, but the winning stickers that you put on the side of the cover make it a bit messy. So, I think it'll look good without the stickers. Other than this, everything seems okay.

Blurb: 4.5/5

The blurb is perfect and well described. It wasn't too short or too long; it was well fitted. But there were some grammar mistakes, which I'll mention later. For the grammar and punctuation mistakes, I deduct marks here. Except for the issue, it's okay.

Plot: 15/15

The plot is very unique. You perfectly brought up the factual truth of life into the story. I really love the concept's deep meaning and how it wanted to promote that 'Love Yourself'. It is really a good, motivational story. I think the reader's mind can be healed by this amazing plot. Though at first, I guessed that the girl might be dead, the scenes after that just amazed my mind. Also, I found out that the plot is quite educational too. Overall, it seems great to me.

Characters: 5/5

Nothing to say about the characters. It's very good; the characters were equally described. Their background history was written perfectly there. There isn't too much or too little introduction; it's perfect.

Pacing: 5/5

The pacing seems well to me. It wasn't too fast or too slow. It flows very naturally with its plot. You put the vivid description of the surroundings where it's needed, and I like this side. Though at the ending, it seems a little bit fast to me. I still have a thirst to see more scenes of Iseul (Yoona) and Jungkook together happily enjoying their lives. But it's okay to end here too, because if you increase it, it won't be a short story anymore.

Writing Style: 11/15

You've got to change your writing style a little bit according to your mistakes, which I'll describe later. Other than those problems, the writing style (paraphrasing, changing POV, etc.) is okay.

Grammar & Punctuation: 6/10

There are a lot of grammatical issues that I found. The whole book is filled with mixed tense, like you used present tense in the first line, but in the second line you used past tense. In a statement, it's okay. But you used this method in the normal line. In the blurb, I found this mistake too. It hinders the reader's normal reading pace. There are some issues with capitalization too. As an example, I saw you capitalize the first word after you put the ellipsis, but my suggestion is that—don't do it. Also give a space after you put an ellipsis, then normally write further the story. I found some spelling mistakes and unnecessary spaces too. Please make sure to revise your drafts clearly to avoid these circumstances.

Vocabulary: 5/5

The vocabulary is good. It's perfect for the story; just there were some spelling mistakes that should be corrected. Other than that, everything's fine.

Overall Evaluation: 7.5/10

I really love the story 'Echo in the Wind' and I really enjoy reading this story. It's my second time reading a fantasy/paranormal story. I'm not fond of this genre. But your story is just on another level. The plot is really something. I really suggest others read this story. Though it has many mistakes now, which can disturb the reader's peace. So, I hope that you'll correct them soon and I didn't miss out on anything.

Total: 68/80

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𝓒𝓞𝓝𝓖𝓡𝓐𝓣𝓤𝓛𝓐𝓣𝓘𝓞𝓝𝓢!

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