𝐏𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐜𝐢𝐩𝐚𝐧𝐭𝐬' 𝐒𝐜𝐨𝐫𝐞𝐬𝐡𝐞𝐞𝐭

Book: Romantic Story

Author: @aurora_2604

Judge: @LAJoyner

Score: 26/30

Grammar and Punctuation: 5/5

Engagement and Hook: 4/5

There is a hook, but seems repeated, saying the same thing, just changing up the adjectives.

Character Introduction: 5/5

The introduction of the main characters, Jungkook and Taehyung, is well done with just one sentence.

Tone and Atmosphere: 4/5

The tone was a little over the top with the burning, consuming, profound longing, need and unexpected bonds and the final surrendering to love narrative. Toning it down a bit by re-arranging the wording could still convey the depth of their feelings and the intensity of the emotions that are to come in the story.

Plot Significance: 5/5

The blurb definitely lets you know the plot of the story.

Originality and Creativity: 3/5

I found the blurb repeated itself just with different words used to say the same thing trying to show the intensity of the relationship. I condensed it down and arranged the order a little differently just to give you an idea of what you can do with your own words. They are your words just rearranged for better clarity. I did change 'do' to 'can' in the question 'Or can (do) they hold something deeper?'

Total: 26/30

Grammatically changed and rearranged edited version of the blurb (Just a suggestion you can use if you want):

Are all love stories romantic? Or can they hold something deeper?

In a twist of fate, two people who should never have crossed paths were brought together. Despite their mutual hatred, what began as a necessary arrangement, slowly transformed into an unexpected bond.

This is the story of Jungkook, a rich and dashing bachelor with a rough edge, who developed a deep passion for Taehyung, a kind-hearted and innocent supervisor.

They discover they couldn't resist the pull of desire and need, eventually surrendering to the depth of true love.

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Book: Lust's Deadline

Author: @Yoonkeeri

Judge: @LAJoyner

Score: 24.9/30

Grammar and Punctuation: 4.9/5

An em dash should be used for an interruption in dialogue. An em dash is longer than a hyphen so use two hyphens against each other to create an em dash if your keyboard doesn't have an em dash. The single hyphen is too small. Some word programs will make a double hyphen into an em dash, because it recognizes that is what you are trying to do.

Engagement and Hook: 2/5

The blurb seems to give a reader's digest version of the whole story. The blurb is giving away too much information of the main plot. The blurb is over 320 words. In this case less could be more. There are some great hooks in there that will pull a reader in; they just have to find them. Condense the blurb to give the reader just enough to make them beg to read the story.

Character Introduction: 5/5

The introduction of the main lead character sets the stage for the story.

Tone and Atmosphere: 4/5

The tone revolves around Jin, Namjoon and Yoongi, maybe including a little angst of the others worry trying to figure out what is wrong with Jin and Yoongi. Are they coming down with something? Why are they acting so strange? Maybe condensing the blurb and adding a line or two about the others will help draw in readers too.

Plot Significance: 4/5

Though the blurb does give some insight to the plot it can still be improved upon.

Originality and Creativity: 5/5

Definitely an original 'condition' to have. Nymphomania comes to mind.

Total: 24.9/30

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Book: Hotel DeLuna

Author: @Seong_Grace

Judge: @LAJoyner

Score: 24.5/30

Grammar and Punctuation: 2/5

There is room for improvement in sentence structure and word choices. A few misspellings include 'evey' for every which occurred twice and 'murmerred' for murmured. There is an incomplete sentence, remove the word 'who' after Bora ChaeY/n then the sentence becomes a statement and complete.

Engagement and Hook: 4/5

The blurb seems to have issues with 'into English translation.' Causing some of the sentences to sound awkward with words like 'cascading the town', 'emitting from the sky'.

Character Introduction: 4.5/5

To complete the two main leads character introduction, include Park Jimin's name as the mysterious new manager.

Tone and Atmosphere: 5/5

The blurb does give the tone of mystery and suspense.

Plot Significance: 5/5

Originality and Creativity: 4/5

The blurb, in its current form is slightly awkward to read for me, as English is my first language. But the main gist of the information is intriguing.

Total: 24.5/30

Grammatically changed and rearranged edited version of the blurb (Just a suggestion you can use if you want)

Hotel DeLuna stands in the center of Seoul, witnessing every crime committed by the cities populace, the living and unliving souls alike.

The tower of the hotel stands sentinel in the moon's light and as usual when the clock strikes midnight, the dark souls begin to enter.

Invisible to the human eye there is a darkness that covers the hotel under the glow of the night's moon.

Are the rumors true about the DeLuna Corporation? Will the murmurs of the secret hidden beneath the hotel be revealed? Why have the souls stopped coming when a mysterious young man, Park Jimin, becomes the hotels new manager?

Why does Bora Chae, Y/n, owner of the hotel and CEO of the DeLuna Corporation become angry when a higher power places Park Jimin as manager of her unique hotel?

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