𝐏𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐜𝐢𝐩𝐚𝐧𝐭𝐬' 𝐒𝐜𝐨𝐫𝐞𝐬𝐡𝐞𝐞𝐭

Book: The Snowman

Author: @BANGTANHOLIC_FICS

Judge: @Hells07dealer

Score: 23/30

Grammar and Punctuation: 5/5

The prologue has no grammatical or punctuation errors. Though the prologue is not descriptive, the narration is still appreciable.

Engagement and Hook: 3.5/5

The prologue is engaging, but not engaging enough to completely get you hooked. Maybe you can try to enhance the presentation of the prologue. Though the way it is written, it conveys the feelings so purely and in a raw manner.

Character Introduction: 4/5

The prologue didn't really give away the characters straight away, but at the same time, without even using names, the prologue has given a significant amount of introduction about the characters' relationship and individuality.

Tone and Atmosphere: 5/5

The tone and atmosphere were very well conveyed through the words. The narration has really touched my heart. The story, though having a common plot, still evokes feelings in your heart.

Plot Significance: 3.5/5

The prologue is important for the plot; however, it has given away the whole main plot already through a few lines. It would have been good to some extent, but revealing the whole plot has spoiled the story a little.

Originality and Creativity: 2/5

The story is creative, but I am not sure about originality. The plot didn't show me anything different, which is why. This plot, as you must have known, is one of the very common ones.

Total: 23/30

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Book: Broken Petal

Author: @Queenfanfriction2010

Judge: @Hells07dealer

Score: 18/30

 
Grammar and Punctuation: 2/5

Unfortunately, the story contains several grammatical errors and missing punctuation, such as commas, throughout multiple lines. I would recommend reviewing the text again or utilizing a grammar-checking app to ensure accuracy.

Engagement and Hook: 2/5

The prologue fell short in terms of engagement and hooking the reader's interest. It lacked conviction and captivation.

Character Introduction: 3/5

The prologue did not provide any clear character introductions, making it difficult to understand the story's context.

Tone and Atmosphere: 5/5

Despite some issues, the prologue effectively conveyed the tone and atmosphere of the story.

Plot Significance: 3/5

Honestly, I didn't find the prologue crucial to the main plot. The prologue touches on themes of abandonment, hidden sorrow, and heartbreak, suggesting that these are central to the story. However, without more context, it's challenging to see how this prologue sets up the main plot or hints at what lies ahead, it didn't significantly contribute to the story's overall direction.

Originality and Creativity: 3/5

The prologue is based on familiar heartbreak and loss tropes. The imagery and phrasing are emotional but don't provide a unique fresh insight. With more specificity and a unique twist, it could be better.

Total: 18/30

Overall, your story has potential, but it requires refinement in areas like grammar, character introduction, and plot significance. Don't hesitate to seek feedback and revise your work to make it shine. Keep up the good work. 

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Book: The Dark Desire

Author: @prxtty_moon

Judge: @Hells07dealer

Score: 25/30

Grammar and Punctuation: 5/5

I was impressed to find that the grammar and punctuation in the story were impeccable. I didn't encounter any errors, which made for a smooth and enjoyable reading experience.

Engagement and Hook: 3/5

While the story was engaging and well-planned, I felt that the prologue was a bit too lengthy. With a large cast of characters, it was challenging to keep track of everyone. I would suggest condensing the prologue to make it more manageable for readers.

Character Introduction: 5/5

The character introductions were well-executed, providing a clear understanding of each character's personality, background, and motivations. The main characters, supporting characters, and even the past events were skillfully woven into the narrative.

Tone and Atmosphere: 4/5

The prologue effectively conveyed the tone and atmosphere of the story, making it easy to become immersed in the world you've created. Your writing style is descriptive and engaging, allowing readers to visualize the scenes with ease.

Plot Significance: 5/5

The prologue is crucial to the plot, as it provides a comprehensive understanding of the past events that shape the story. By introducing the characters and their motivations, you've laid a solid foundation for the narrative to unfold.

Originality and Creativity: 3/5

While the story is creative, I'm not convinced it's entirely original. The tropes and plot elements, such as the mafia clan and businessman, feel familiar. However, your execution and writing style make the story enjoyable despite the familiar themes.

Total: 25/30

Overall, your story has a lot of potential, and with some refinement, it could be even more engaging. Keep working on condensing your prologue and exploring the fresh plot

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HOST'S NOTE: A story takes so many efforts and dedication to be written. You all have done amazing work as an author. This review was not to discourage you or criticize you, but to point out what could make the prologue standout even more and what could highlight your efforts even more. Never give up and do your best, learning and improving alongside. I hope y'all will take this positively and achieve success in your writing journey.

Cheers to your amazing work!!!