Author: SamEl145

Title: The Rules which are meant to break

Genre: Teen Fiction/Young Adult

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Italics - To show a quote from your book and also the correct version of the quote.

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Title: 3/5

I like your title. It corresponds to the plot and fits with the genre; teen fiction, very well. Although, your title isn't original. If someone was to search for your book on Wattpad, it would be difficult for the person to find because so many books are going to show and I doubt if you'd like that. Everyone would want and love their title to stand out when mentioned, isn't it? Also, your title is too long. I'd advise you to get a shorter one that corresponds with the plot and fits the genre so that people would be able to remember the title of your book easily. When things are long, people tend to forget it more than when things are short and simple.

Cover: 6/10

I admire your cover. It's unique and all. Also, I like the different font that was used. One was to emphasize, which was great! You have your name on the cover, which was fantastic. I say this because some people tend to forget to add their name on the cover.

Nevertheless, if your target is to gather teenagers for your book, you and I know both know what pulls them. The like things that are eye-catchy, so that even if they were to introduce their friends to the book, their friends would be lured too. Also, it doesn't go with the title. The title says, 'The Rules which are meant to break', while the cover says, 'The bad boy breaks the good girl'. I don't know if you get what I'm saying. But you have let them correspond. What in the cover, shows us that the rules are meant to be broken? Nothing. It just contains a boy and a girl sitting.

I'd be very honest because that was what I promised, if I was to judge your book by your cover, it'd take days before I decide to read your book or accept to read it and if I see it that way, then that means other people see it that way too (well, maybe).

Blurb: 4/5

Your blurb was thrilling, seriously! Bravo! It was interesting to read and made me want to jump into your book. Your choice of words was great. The words said by your characters too were amazing because the first sentence of a blurb is supposed to hook a reader and it did! So kudos to you!

Nonetheless, there was a grammatical error somewhere and I'll like to correct it. Also, the positioning of words and punctuation were wrongly used. I quote from your book:

Alexis Rodriguez, a rich high schooler who 'pretends' to be a lesbian. But there is a reason behind that. And that reason is none other than her parents. And now she has made some rules for herself which she doesn't intend to break it at any cost.

This can be:

Alexis Rodriguez is a rich high schooler who 'pretends' to be a lesbian. There's a reason behind this, and this reason is none other than her parents. She also has decided to make some rules for herself, which she doesn't intend to break at any cost.

The first sentence was not complete, so I completed it. I hope you see the difference. Also, kindly space out your blurb, it's packed together and this can be seen as unpleasant. Great work in your blurb, though.

Plot: 12/15

Your story goes with the chosen genre perfectly because your characters go to school and are teenagers. I could relate to your book very well, I didn't get confused because you explained everything very well and did not disappoint me as a reader, kudos to you! When reading the story, I was able to capture every scenario and understand what was going on without much problem or stress. Everything follows up and does makes sense, so I don't understand why you unpublished it. Although, it's your decision as a writer and not mine.

Nevertheless, I'll advise you to add more events to your story to make it more interesting.

Originality: 9/10

You deserve the mark because, from most teen fiction books that I've read, the writers hardly create something different. It's always The bad boy and the Good Girl or The Bad Girl and The Good Boy. You twisted everything by bringing Alexis' childhood friend. So, kudos to you. It differs from other books on Wattpad and comes out unique.

Characters: 14/15

I LOVE YOUR CHARACTERS! They are so interesting! I like the unique personalities you gave to each of them. This can help readers identity who did this or who's talking because of how you brought out their inner and outer personalities. I don't know if this is the right word but I believe that because Alexis has this rule and tends to act like a lesbian, she comes out as a reserved person.

Although, I'll love it if you could be free with your characters. I don't know how to explain this, or maybe it's because of Alexis I'm saying this - I don't even know. But sometimes, try to make your characters control you as a writer. I don't know if this makes sense, but yeah? Yeah.

Reference to the Category: 5/5

I don't have a problem here because your story fits perfectly with the genre you chose; teen fiction/young adult.

Writing Style {Expression & Creativity}: 11/15

You express an idea vividly but not all that vivid. You hardly describe things and places, but you do for human beings which is great. Although, I'll advise you to take the readers into your world. Let us imagine things the way you'd like us to imagine it because if you allow the readers to imagine it themselves, sometimes, it can come out as cliche. We'll have the normal thinking that other stories have given them. Allow them to explore your imagination.

Vocabulary and Spelling: 8/10

You spelled every word correctly, so I don't have a problem in this sector. Some of the vocabulary (words) you use to describe things and people is good and amazing. But as I had stated before, if you work on a description of places, it'll boost this area too because we'll be able to know the amount of vocabulary you're able to use without repetition and makes your description unraveling.

Grammatical Structure: 19/20

I hardly found grammatical errors. Your work was smooth and easy. The dialogues and paragraphs are broken down proportionally, therefore, readers can hardly get bored. Kudos to you!

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

I'll be willing to read your book when I'm free but I'm packed with so many works, both from Wattpad and outside Wattpad. Although, when you republish it again, I'll search for it and continue where I stopped.

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Total: 99/120

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If this review came out too rude or strict, I'm really sorry, I didn't mean to let it come out in that manner. But well, if you believe that I wasn't rude and this helped, I'll really like to get feedback from you. You can leave it in the comment section. If I said anything that was wrong, kindly pull my attention to that.

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