Author: _shere03

Title: Bitter-Sweet

Genre: Teen Fiction/Young Adult

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Kindly note the following:

Italics - To show a quote from your book and also the correct version of the quote.

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Title: 3/5

I liked the title - the way it contradicted itself. Well, the literary device for this is called oxymoron so I'll use this. I like the fact that you decided to become really creative to apply oxymoron in your title, which keeps a reader wondering how something bitter can be sweet. Although, it's a cliche name. When someone searches for your book on Wattpad, many names would pop up and this kind of thing makes your book difficult to find, sadly. From the chapters I read, the plot doesn't really correspond with the title. Maybe it's because of the amount of chapters that I read.

Cover: 2/10

I like your cover but firstly, it doesn't go with the title. It doesn't show the name 'Bitter-Sweet' but only the words 'Sweet', so I'll be glad if you work on it. Secondly, the quote that is below the title on the cover isn't really visible. Readers can't read it because the font used and its size makes it difficult to read. Its position is in its right place - I like the position. Thirdly, *I'm sorry but not sorry* the cover isn't catchy. It can't really pull as many readers as it's supposed to. Also, to be very honest, if I was to judge your book by the cover, I wouldn't be thrilled to read the book. So kindly work on these mentioned to improve on your cover.

Blurb: 2/5

Okay so first, kindly keep in my mind that a blurb is supposed to be written in present tense. There were grammatical and punctuation errors too and there were some sentences that did not need to be repeated if it had been stated already. I'd really love it if you could work on this because a blurb plays a big role when it comes to a book. I quote from your book:

I heard a knock on my bedroom window. who could be at this hour? Knocking on my bedroom window. I took my hair dryer from the dressing table and went closer to the window. Safety first. It was pretty dark outside, I couldn't see who it is but I was sure it was a man.

This should be:

I hear a knock on my bedroom window. Who can it be at this hour? I take my hair dryer from the dressing table and go closer to the window. Safety first, I remind myself. It is pretty dark outside, I can't see who it is but I am sure it is a man.

Nonetheless, your blurb gave an idea about the plot but not fully and besides, what's SOB? You can never ever make the readers get lost in your blurb, that just pulls them off. Also, I'm sorry to say but not sorry, your blurb can not attract readers and make them want to jump in. Well, some might want to because the actions and words said by the characters might make them want to read it and know what happened but due to the fact that I get pulled off by blurbs that have so many grammatical errors, I tend to go the other way.

Plot: 13/15

Your plot connects with the genre very much. You were able to match up to what teens really really love. It was relatable and entertaining. It also followed up and made sense but again, please work on your descriptions. At least, let the readers know how a place looked like so that the imagination can remain in their minds.

Originality: 5/10

I'm sorry but not sorry, your book sounded so cliche. It didn't really differ from books on Wattpad. It doesn't really have its unique features, although, I can say that some of the events that came up were great and could keep the readers moving from chapter to chapter to know more.

Characters: 15/15

Your characters' personalities were unique. These personalities could make readers love and enjoy your characters very much. They could easily tell how their feelings, the thoughts wavering through your characters' minds and they also progressed as the plot moved. You gave out a lot in this category which I fancied a lot. I also like the way they reacted and went about things.

Reference to the category: 5/5

I actually didn't have any problem over here because it actually fell under the teen fiction/young adult genre. So great work over here.

Writing Style {Expression & Creativity}: 10/15

As I had stated before, you were creative with the events you brought up - they were interesting ones. You were also able to express an idea vividly, which helped the readers have an idea and also imagine everything that was going on. Nevertheless, I'd advice you to describe things more than just people. Even if you didn't describe, at least you can leave an adjective to describe the place. E.g, instead of saying 'I entered the kitchen', you could use, 'I entered the sparkling ultramodern kitchen'. You get what I'm trying to say right? Yeah? Yeah.

Great work here though.

Vocabulary and Spelling: 9/10

I don't have a problem here because you did very well over here. Your vocabulary was unraveling and outstanding. Also, you spelt every word correctly. Kudos to you over here.

Grammatical Structure: 15/20

I hardly found grammatical errors, your use of tenses were stable but as I had stated before, your blurb said otherwise. The dialogues and paragraphs were broken down proportionally, which made your book easy to read with no problem. So great work over here!

Overall Enjoyment: 10/10

Oh my, oh my! I'd really be honest, I LOVE YOUR BOOK! You're really good at writing and you're creative! You know how to drag readers on which was amazing. Keep up with the good work! This story will definitely take you somewhere!

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Total:89/120

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Good luck with your writing!

Your crazy reviewer,
jes_uba123