Title, Blurb, Cover

The title is good, and relevant to the plot (elaborated more below), but I probably would not have clicked on the story based on the title. It didn't hook me.

The cover is fine, but I would not have clicked it on the wild of wattpad. Mainly because I don't understand what the image is and it doesn't say anything about the story to me. But it does hint the tone of the story. 

Humans were goners. Bruised ego's, loss of morals, the population rapidly decreasing...Who are they now? To think of themselves as the most supreme, intelligent species in the planet? Will humans ever rise to the top and become superior to all once again? M̛̠͕͙͓̹ͪa̸̺̠̲̓͋ý̇ͥ͗҉̗͙͖̹̯̤̝ͅb̛̞͇͋ͯ̎e̵͉̫̹̟̳̲̦ͮ̈͊ͤ.̭̥͖ͭ̍ͧ͗͘.͇̦͋̆͘.

The world has gone through an 'incident' arranged by the worlds leading governments and scientists. In an attempt to keep only the high-class members of society in control of the world. They separated humans by creating metalláxeis (mutants.) So that in this world, humans are once again put on pedestals and would be known as 'Originals.' Finally. Things are as they should be. Right?

But will humans and mutants live in social harmony? Or will the mutants retaliate and rule the world? M̢̗̰̬̟͎̹͛̌̓à̖̗͙ͩ͢y̹͎̝͔̩͕̠̬̏̌ͬ̇̕b̶̥̳̳̝̫̦̩̂e̸͕̤̺̣͈͋̏ͦ ͬ̍҉̱̳i̲͙̫̍̃ͥ͐́n̢̺̭̜͙̹͕͔ͭͣ ̴̖̺̱̼̻͐̓͊a̶̜̤̫̬̤̱͍ͪ̾n̮̤͚͎̭̯͐́o̻̬͙̦͈̊ͣ̒̅̀t̶̤̟͎͎͖̅ͣͅḫ͖́̀͆̊́ͅeͩ̇҉͚̜̙̩̼̖̩r̛̭͖͙̈́͂̋ͩ ͪͤ̚҉̥͓̱̮̤̥ẅ̺̼̠͖̭̫͈́̇́ó̴͇̦͎̪̬̺̪̪r͙͙͙̹ͯ͊̂́l̶̪̗̎͆d̷̪̩͙̩͎͍͙͙̓ͬ͒ͧ ̸̮̹̩͋ͅơ͕̯̦̠̻͖̬͈̾͛r̩̭̹̣ͤ̏̓̃͢ ̨̪̀ͅt̫͖̩̊̆͒͘-̢͕̳̫̬͌̊̓ͦṱ̶̖̘ͮ̓i̦̳͒ͫ̄͝m͔̩̮ͯͫ͛̈͟e̶̞̖̿͂?There are people in this very tale that thought of themselves as being human. But they will soon find out that not everything in life is guaranteed. The world may look bright...but it's darker than it seems.

The blurb doesn't really say much about what to expect from the story, but it does give strong dystopian vibes. A good blurb should introduce the main characters, the plot (especially the premise), the main conflict, main themes and subplots.

You did introduce the main conflict and genre, but the promise wasn't delivered in the first few chapters and you didn't introduce the MC. The blurb is just too 'broad' for me. Maybe you could be more specific, and make the blurb shorter. 

Writing

The writing is of good quality, with no noticeable errors in language. Most parts were clear to understand. The prose is good, although it may not be distinct or vibrant.

Plot

The plot was difficult to follow at some parts, but mostly clear.

I would say plot is the weakest part of this story. No promise was delivered, and I didn't know what to expect from the story. What's the main conflict? What does the character want? 

The chapters did not give me much sense of progress- it felt like one loosely-connected event happening after the other. The story overall felt dull to me, even though the worldbuilding was quite interesting. 

Descriptions

Your descriptions are great. The way you described characters quickly through the mental document was a unique idea, and you do a great job of grounding readers in scenes. Well done on this one!

Worldbuilding

Your worldbuilding is generally good. You didn't info-dump, but I did feel like a lot of info was given in the first chapter (even though it was in dialogue form, maybe you could sprinkle it through 3 chapters?) Mostly you introduced worldbuilding as it became relevant to the plot. (however, as mentioned before, I didn't understand what to expect from the plot)

Caelum's mental document felt sort of like an info dump, because it could be skipped and the next chapter could be read just fine. 

One other thing relating to characters- there were some character names you mentioned, which didn't have a relation to the plot in the chapters the I read (except Adeyemi). General rule: if a character is important enough to have a name, they should have at least a subplot or a side-quest in your story. If a character is given a name, readers will generally look for the name later on in the story.

Characters

Mostly, I felt indifferent to the characters. They weren't unlikeable or likeable, I didn't care about what happened to them, it felt like they were there for the story, instead of the story existing because of them. 

(I generally prefer character-driven stories. It's perfectly fine to have a world-driven or plot driven story. However, most readers would agree they are there for the characters. People are the heart of stories. As Brandon Sanderson said- All three things (Plot, Character and worldbuilding) should be cool... but if you have to compromise on one, it should be worldbuilding. )

Farai and Adrien did have distinct voices, and they spoke like teenagers. I just found their voices uninteresting, but then again- they are in a dystopian world. (You might want to consider Third Person Close /Limited for your story.) I just wish the characters were a little more 3-dimensional and dynamic.

Lastly- where are all the girls? This is COMPLETELY a preference, but I generally don't like non-diverse stories. It won't ruin a book for me, but diversity will make me appreciate the writer more. Your story doesn't pass the Bechdel test. I highly recommend fixing this (even if your target audience is strictly boys- I don't think that's the case- adding girl characters is pretty easy.)

Summary:

Your strong points are descriptions, worldbuilding and especially- use of media!

Your weaknesses are plot and character.

Overall the story felt dull to me, but lots of readers love dystopian, so don't be discouraged at all! Maybe this is your first project? If it is so, don't over-complicate it. You could try plotting your story, or editing for plot and character first and then moving on to smaller things. 

As always, only the writer knows what's best for a story, so take everything I said with a grain of salt. Good luck!