The Love Letters of Boaz Jackson
AuthorDani

99 / 100

First I would just like to start with the fact that the cover is damn beautiful. It just vibes with the story. Another fact that I loved about this book was that it was a lot different from what we usually read here. A fresh concept, with absolutely beautifully crafted characters, this book is a treat. The story is unfolding slowly keeping up the characters in wraps. It's unfolding with each chapter and it's a good way to keep your readers hooked. Good luck!

The Cost of Falling
0liviaRose436

91 / 100

The book was refreshing to read and I really enjoyed reading about Emma. Both Danny and Emma are beautifully written and I could understand what they were going through. All the descriptions were on point. But there are a few suggestions. First, I think you need a cover change. It's because the cover seems totally different from what the story is about. Also, you can divide the description into separate paragraphs so it becomes easier to read. Good luck!

Melted in the Mirror
StarsxStories

95 / 100

I enjoyed reading this book. I loved Audrea as a character, she's relatable and smart. I simply loved the plot. It is new and fresh and something I hadn't read in a while. It was pretty cool to read how a normal girl blends herself into a boarding school of royals. All the emotions that were portrayed felt relatable and it was beautifully described. On the side-note, your grammar and sentence structure is really good in the chapters but I cannot say the same for your description. So I guess you can edit that :) Good luck!

Sunshine
FCCleary

95 / 100

Interesting story and I liked the way it unfolds with each chapter. The overall pace was good but honestly, I initially had a bit of difficulty in getting the hang of the chapter. To be honest, the first two chapters went ahead a bit too fast which was probably why I had to read it twice. For this, I will only suggest adding more dialogues and descriptions about Sunny and the characters around her so that people can connect with the characters before moving ahead with the story. Also, extend a bit of your story description without giving away the plot as the description needs that 'hook' or 'driving action' that will pull them to read the story. Good luck!

The Whispers in the Walls
JEB2205

93 / 100

All in all, it was a great read. The way you have described the character of Esther was very fascinating to read. I like the way you expressed her thoughts and emotions, I could connect with her at a level. But with that, I would also say that starting a chapter with what she feels is not actually a good way to start a chapter. You can always incorporate her thoughts while writing a scene where she expresses her views. This would seem less info-dumping than writing about her character in the start. With that, I would also ask you to get a cover as the story inside doesn't vibe with the cover. Good luck!

New Beginnings
kinalhariya

83 / 100

There is a part in your blurb that says "A new place, new bonds, new friendships, new family, and of course new beginnings"— I feel that those 'new' bonds, family, and everything are part of the main character's new beginning which renders all those other things unnecessary. Your title is short and simple but it's not intriguing and one can't tell the genre right away and your cover has a nice image but the text placement and font choice are poor.

Your plot was alright, although from the prologue to the first chapter, it felt so rushed that if it weren't a book, you would think that Lawyer Uncle knew about the death of Trisha's parents even before it happened because everything was already mapped out. You showed emotions quite well but it lacked description which is one of the things you need to work on.

I found grammatical errors here and there but not enough to make the book annoying so I guess that's good. Also, your chapters were not too long and not too short either which made it more interesting for me. So far I like all the characters and although I only just met the twins, I already like them a lot (Indian names are bold, by the way...I like it). Trisha really has a lot to learn and I'm interested in seeing how she adjusts to her new surroundings. I was really drawn into the story from the second chapter and I can tell that there is still a lot to be unveiled so I'll definitely be reading more if time permits me. Great job!

We Dance Hard
PerfectMayaa

50 / 100

Your story description is very confusing and it's just words flying here and there. Starting from the very beginning of the blurb, many adjectives were mixed (black young beautiful eighteen year old...). The blurb can start with something like "Eighteen-year-old Star Dazzle dancer, Delphine Michael..." instead of telling us that she is black, young, and beautiful; those things are unnecessary details for the blurb and should be shown in the story itself. All in all, the entire blurb needs to be reconstructed as I understand nothing in it.

The grammatical errors started from the very first line of the book- "Where are my clothes for the live show(?)". A question mark should always be present whenever a question is asked, and full stops should be full stops (.) and not ellipses (...). Whenever a sentence ends, a full stop should be used rather than ellipses which makes it less professional. You should only use ellipses where necessary. Also, in the first chapter, I found Delphine excessively rude - she snapped at literally everyone and was very petty. I believe the term for when she was being taken to the hospital is "numb" and not "fainted", because if she fainted, she wouldn't see, hear or feel anything happening to or around her.

A question has been running through my mind since: Are Delphine and Charlotte agemates? I don't understand their friendship or how they clicked. I feel like the hospital scenes were not very professional and it seemed like a carefree hospital. I enjoyed the relatable moments in your book like the brother-sister banter, the pain of going to school, and some other things.

On her first day at school, she said she was trying not to be proud but by bringing a limousine to school, I'm pretty sure that it was her aim. Also, I don't think the principal cones to newcomers when they arrive at school - I believe the students go to the office, so when Miss Kimberly approached her like it was a mission she was assigned to, I found it strange. I got more concerned about how she happened to know the teachers' names in just one day.

Reading further into your book, I realized that it does have a lot of potential and a good storyline but what lessened the quality were slowing down the story where it was supposed to be fast and vice versa, grammatical errors, unrealistic scenes, and some others. If you can work on all these - maybe a rewrite of the book, it would be really nice.

Falling in Love with a Ghost
In_Her_Own_World-06

83 / 100

The first thing that drew me into this book was the blurb. I just had to give it a solid five because it is perfect and has everything you would want in a blurb. The cover is also simple and nice but I can't help but feel like something is missing. As for the title, there are many alternatives but I think you settled for something quite common - "Falling in love with a..."

I would say the first chapter was informative; you did not beat about the bush but instead, started the story right away which made it interesting for me. However, the plot started moving slowly after Matthias was sent to the human world. Initially, I got confused because when you explain things about the characters' background it gets confusing; I don't know if that's just me, or the way you write.

After reading the first five chapters I realized that I have no idea of how the characters look because there was little or no physical description which I think needs to be worked on. The description of places is something I also think you need to work on a bit more and I know you can do it because you describe emotions and actions beautifully.

I could spot some grammatical errors throughout the book but that didn't stop it from being enjoyable. Your story doesn't put people on cliffhangers, but it puts them in a state where they are eager to know so many things. I'm eager to see how the chemistry between Matthias and Faye grows and am also interested in the ghost-turning-human-because-of-love thing. A beautiful work right there, keep it up!

High School Summer Camp
EkehAnita

57 / 100

"High School Summer Camp" as a title is not bad, but it sounds common in my ears. However, you can keep it if you feel like it suits the story a lot. The cover could definitely be better than that; right now it's not very attractive because of the clash of too many fonts and the unnecessary border. The blurb does not really say anything about the book other than the fact that they are going to a camp on a bus. A blurb should not just consist of dialogue without any actual description to give readers an insight on what they are about to go into. Putting that aside, there are some grammatical errors in the blurb that you have now which I will talk about when analysing the main story.

Starting with the first chapter, I found grammatical errors from the beginning till the end. When an action follows dialogue, the dialogue should end with a full stop. For example, in the blurb where it says "We have three large buses here which we will use for the trip", a full stop is to be placed behind 'trip' because an action (the man pointing) is carried afterward. Throughout the first chapter, it was evident that you use the word 'said' a lot. There are many other words to replace 'said' like commented, replied, responded, answered, remarked, depending on how it is used in the sentence. Your knowledge should be expanded on this. Furthermore, you should be careful when writing and make sure to always place full stops, commas, and other punctuations where they are needed.

I liked most of your characters but Lauretta's character was one I did not quite understand- one second she's nice and the other she's mean. I feel like you should put more effort into describing your characters and giving them a personality that we can hold on to. Some parts in the book felt unnecessary while some felt unrealistic- like how Laura and Jake could freely kiss in a Nigerian school for that matter or how Lauretta could put on make-up to school. Fine, I agree that there are schools for rich people but I don't think any school in Nigeria allows students to put on makeup to school, no matter how heavy or light it is. As for the unnecessary parts, they were parts like when the prefects were announced or when Freddie was picked from the airport. I felt those things didn't really have relevance to the plot and only made the book slower.

The pace of your book was really slow as they only started getting close to the camp scenes in the sixth chapter (i had to read till chapter nine). I enjoyed the book a lot more when they arrived at the camp and you have a way of incorporating backstories which I really like. Your book has a lot of potential and I believe if you can go to an editing and cover shop, it would be a start. I hope this review helped!

Long Way Down
Summer_in_september

74 / 100

Your title sounds really tragic and it gives the feeling that sh't is about to go down. Your cover is not so good when it comes to font choice and the visibility aspect. Personally, I feel like it could be a lot better. You have quite a messy blurb. The beginning is not so strong but towards the end, I got captivated; you should try to work on the start of your blurb.

At the beginning of your book, I found some mistakes like how Mrs. Owens was addressed as a 'he' and 'she' at the same time and some spelling errors but one thing I really noticed throughout was how long your paragraphs get at times. It can be really disturbing when there are about 24 sentences but not one space in between. There should be times that you can split them in ways that would still make sense.

I can say that you did a good job with majority of the characters by giving them relatable personalities. I like Dallas's character - she's confident and realistic. She knows not to warm up to strangers so easily and she stands up for her brother even when he has hurt her. I am sorry, author but right now, Liam is the absolute beast - he's hot, but mean. I don't like when people are just mean for no reason (he might have a reason, but I don't know what it is) so I have a reason to dislike him. As for characters like Abby, I like her sense of reasoning and the relationship she has with the Marshals, especially Mrs. Marshal, but when it comes to Mrs. Marshal, I really don't like her. I can relate to Dallas so much when it comes to this favoritism thing because I have an older brother and my mum does the same thing except that she tries not to make it too obvious. The only thing I can say I like about her is how she looks out for her children like any mother would.

At one point, I was confused about the ages of the main characters because they were only about fourteen or fifteen but acted more like seventeen-year-olds; the party scene added to my confusion on that one. To begin with, their friends invited them to the party. My question is, who is the host? It surely can't be a fourteen-year-old. Then, besides that, Abby got drunk way too fast, and I'm pretty sure she's not allowed to drink haha.

Overall, I like your story and I'm eager to see where it's headed. If you ask me I would say that the blurb is a spoiler because so far nothing has happened and the blurb is literally telling us to look out for Luke so basically anyone who reads the blurb before reading the book is eager to see what Luke does to Dallas and automatically suspects him.

Sage
MaliaaLewis

DISQUALIFIED

Reason: Not having up to 5 chapters.

Joyful
emmaeverafter

76 / 100

The cover could have been more attractive and attention-grabbing but I loved the fact that the picture was smiley as the title suggests. The opening chapter was good enough to catch attention and the writing is nice. The grammar was good too.

Shackles
Amara3271

80 / 100

The cover itself is enough to catch the attention of the readers. The name suggests a strong plot. The mystery part is hooking. And the description was nice and crisp. The opening chapter was fine and the story had a newness to it.

Roars
RaveningLynx

93 / 100

The story, the cover, the title, the font, everything is a clear winner from the beginning of the opening of this book. The first chapter is so, so exciting. The characters are brilliantly executed and the pacing is amazing and fast. The mesmerizing cover blows the heart away.

Shine Again
lrm2323

75 / 100

The cover suited the title and the plot. The plot is common but felt interesting. The writing style was good. And certainly, there were no such grammatical mistakes to be seen. The title of the story is like a fresh breath of air. And the description was very well written.

Gun in my Hand
feufeu15

82 / 100

GUN IN MY HAND is a suspense / thriller / mystery book that would keep you on the edge of your seat waiting to see what's next. Set in the 1960s this book displays a plot of intense revelations and also shows the feelings of the main character. I love the way the writer ensures each character has a part to play and is not thrown away.

A Walk in your Shoes
MissJina

72 / 100

This book is a cliche book with sauce. An alternate version of 'Mean Girls'. The girl struggles to keep her relationship with her parents from going down the hill and pretending that everything is alright in school. I would love to hold her and tell her it's okay not to be okay. The writer's style allows the reader to connect with the character's emotions as I have illustrated above. Not your regular tutor-student romance story. A book with spice.

First Love Kisses and Love Letters
ily_ari_grande

71 / 100

This book is a sprinkle of (TO ALL THE BOYS I'VE LOVED BEFORE by Jenny Han and A Korean movie I had watched a long time ago) in all the right places. If you are looking for a book with the right amount of fluffiness to share in the embarrassment of the characters you have got it here. I couldn't put this book down. It's a nice book to read.

Heart of Sparrow
annkreeves

92 / 100

Being someone who is close to African roots and has access to myths and legends, this book is an excellent description of the 'world supernatural'. A girl who just wants to live her life is faced with her true identity of a mixture of different abilities. Would she get drunk with the power or will she give it up? The perfect mystery.

Artic Heart
penpatron

66 / 100

This book is nice. Its backbone is a cliche story of enemies transitioning to lovers but hey, a little cliche doesn't hurt anyone. The mysterious aura given off by the Male main character is excellent and the Female MC is just like the everyday K-drama high school girl. I love the Divergent vibes also.

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The Love Letters of Boaz Jackson by AuthorDani

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Sunshine by FCCleary
Melted in the Mirror by StarsxStories

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Roars by RaveningLynx
The Whispers in the Walls by JEB2205

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