Just Another Normal Day
liyAwritesgold

47 / 60

I found the title to be clever and unique – a direct Wattpad search showed only one other book with the same title.  The cover was visually interesting but didn't (for me) have a 'wow' factor – it is, however, better than having a stock photo as the cover by leaps and bounds. 

As for the story description/blurb, I did like that I got enough information from it to understand the context of a school shooting story.  I personally don't love lengthy blurbs, so having a short bit of text isn't a problem – but the way that the blurb flows doesn't really hook me into 'opening the book'.

From a grammar standpoint, I found several run-on sentences and misused commas throughout the writing.  It's not anything that can't be cleaned up with a solid edit, but it does interrupt the flow of the writing.  I also noticed an occasional inappropriate dialogue tag.

You chose a heavy topic, one that unfortunately is on the rise again.  I appreciated how you built backstories for the victims and characters who survived in such a short space.  My heart clenched at each moment where a new victim fell, and I know that this had to be a difficult concept to write.  I gave high marks in creativity and originality for the emotional execution of the writing.

Nice job, overall!

The Chronicles of Kora's Heirs
Deiwrites

39 / 60

Your title appears original – a Wattpad search didn't find others like it!  That's a feat these days, so congratulations on the originality of your title!  I don't get a real impression from the title itself of what I'm about to read.  The cover to me is not visually appealing (I will be the first to admit that art is subjective).  For me, it looks piecemeal and not like a cohesive visual to represent the story.

The description made me want to 'pick up the book'.  I find posing questions to be a strong point of intrigue in the jacket blurb.  However, I don't have a clue what Kora is.  It's a term in the title and the blurb, but you can't expect readers to know what it is if they haven't read the book.

From a grammar structure standpoint, I noticed an occasional need for a semicolon vs. comma review.  For me, the entire first chapter was just telling, not showing (that's the first impression of the writing).  Even when we move into an active scene in Chapter Two, phrases like 'a lot' and 'the real stuff' don't connect.  Where you have descriptions with multiple females, using 'she' and 'her' without clarifying the reference point makes hard work for the reader.  A general grammar review to catch things like 'some screw looses' (Ch 3) will help with the overall flow.

Some of the concepts in the book I recognize from other stories.  The idea of a kindred spirit/signature pulls from the Harry Potter wand core idea.  Lara-Jean as a name is from a popular series (P.S. I Love You).  And the idea of royalty in a school setting has a Descendants vibe.  While the idea of magic and fantasy does give some creativity points from me, I couldn't find a unique element to the story in the chapters I read.

Paint me Saved
wanderedwriter

47 / 60

While it didn't have the 'wow factor' that some titles provide, I found that your title was unique (a Wattpad search didn't return any perfect matches other than your story).  Plus, the cover is beautiful (I don't prefer to see loads of stickers on covers – but looking past that at the base it was stunning).

The story description has the bones of a strong blurb.  I noticed a punctuation issue straight away, and while I understood the effect that you're attempting in the blurb... it didn't connect.  It read a bit generic with the tropes revealed in the description (troubled past, love triangle, etc.); I didn't have a hook to convince me to 'open the book'.

From a grammar and structure standpoint, I appreciated that you didn't have massive block texts with info-dumping.  The structure of your writing lent itself to an easy reading flow, although you use hyphens where proper em dashes should be.

I found the concept in the first chapter that just after watching a friend get married as a business deal, being propositioned to do the same was quite repetitive (one area where creativity points were lost in this review). Though, the idea of the brother being the hookup and the complexities that situation caused is intriguing enough to get anyone to turn the page! 

It's a nice read, so far, but I don't know if it is something that qualifies as the 'Random' genre.  This reads as a CEO/billionaire Romance genre setup, based on the initial chapter set.

Summer
LorraineTubbritt

30 / 60

The title "Summer" isn't original; a Wattpad search yielded many results.  While I do like a name that is short and to the point, I couldn't give full credit here.  The cover fit the title, although a concept like summertime is associated with being bright and vibrant – using black and white wasn't a perfect connection.

I like a blurb that is short and to the point (just like titles).  But the risk with short blurbs is that grammar errors have a higher negative impact, such as the a/an error in your blurb.  I didn't have a hook in the jacket description that would convince me to 'open the book'.  The open-ended questions didn't have enough detail to create intrigue.

From a grammar and structure standpoint, I appreciated your choice to use a rotating POV storytelling structure.  However, the line breaks in the middle of a passage like "...as inevitable as/I don't..." (Ch 1) and "...his/keen unblinking..." (Ch 4) are distracting.  You're missing commas/semicolons/em dashes to break up clauses, and some sentences aren't ending with correct punctuation.  In several instances, I noticed an error in using 'your' vs. 'you're'.

The entire first chapter was more of an info dump than a scene, which is where you lost creativity points for the execution of the backstory.  As far as plot goes, I don't subscribe to the teen romance thought of 'this person is my oxygen' or other forms of obsession over a crush – that doesn't qualify as a "so what?" for readers in my demographic.  This story unfortunately just didn't connect with me – an unlucky draw in judging.

Shades of Love
WilliamsFaith0

39 / 60

The title "Shades of Love" isn't original; a Wattpad search yielded many results.  While I do like a name that is short and to the point, I couldn't give full credit here.  The cover image was nice, but the overlay of the text used for the title and author name didn't fit the aesthetic to me (however, art is subjective).

Your story description starts with a massive run-on sentence - which detracts from the ability of the blurb to garner reader interest (not a good first impression of the writing).  However, you do have nested amidst the run-on sentence structure some questions that pose intrigue and begin to form a hook for someone to 'open the book'.

From a grammar and structure standpoint, the run-on sentences unfortunately aren't contained to just the story description.  It's distracting to have incomplete thoughts jammed together in a series of commas; each sentence should have a distinct "so what?" for the reader.  Spelling and word choice errors cropped up from time to time – but weren't so pervasive that it was impossible to understand the intention of the writing.

The concept of a sibling bond is a sweet, creative addition to a storyline; however, the idea of a kid being kept in their home for 'overprotective' tendencies reads as quite unhealthy.  The plot is slow to start, which makes it difficult to judge the overall creativity and originality in the main storyline.  From what I could tell from the meet-cute, background context, and the title, this book may have been a better fit in the Romance genre.

Two Hearts
Stars1_Night

DISQUALIFIED

Reason: Has less than 5 chapters

Just the Way You Are
Summer_in_september

25 / 60

Overall, the book is okay. It had a lot of potential but was hard to get through due to the grammar mistakes and difficult readability. The most common grammar errors were incorrect dialogue/action tags, capitalization issues, unnecessary addition of multiple letters and punctuation, and use of text slang. The readability became difficult when everything was told to the readers instead of shown as well as the repetition of information and the combination of thoughts and narration. Fixing these issues will definitely make this book better.

You Should Hear it from Me
makel_e

41 / 60

This book wasn't bad. The idea and plot are there but it was constantly disrupted by grammar mistakes and the odd readability of it. Some of the most common grammar mistakes were switches from past to present tense, dialogue/action tags, capitalization, starting sentences with words like "because" and "and", and confusing words that are similar like "your" vs "you're" and "he's" vs "his". What caused the readability to be odd was that the majority of sentences could've been combined causing information to be repeated and sentences to be unnecessarily wordy. Going through and fixing these issues will definitely cause this book to be easier to read.

My Online Life
Teekhay25

24 / 60

This book was a small look inside a teenager's mind while on the internet/social media. The title and cover were nice but the description didn't make me want to read it. The grammar was a little hard to get through considering the majority of sentences contained ellipses, asterisks, and/or dashes.

Sparks Fly | Wallpaper Shop
Slothwritter

49/60

The designs are great. But the writer can add more details about the wallpaper. I loved the quote in the description and the cover is soothing.

Welcome to Kaira's Life
Kaira_Writes06

52/60

A straightforward rant book and personal diary kind of a book. The stories about embarrassment and getting sick were hilarious. I felt it would be better if the Q n A are edited, we can see the answers along with questions. It would be easier to read in one go, without scrolling to every question.

✧ T ✧ Theme Shop
cookie_is_sweeter

43/60

The use of emojis for the themes is good. The themes are satisfactory to the people who ordered it. Add the theme shop name to the cover.

His Feisty Queen
__roserosee__

50/60

Great aesthetics and neatly written. But there are certain places where the POVs are confusing.

In Neveah's POV, it is written as she cried during the phone talk scene. Certain words omitted, Neaveah asks Zaylin "What is there to eat.." The word eat is omitted. Please recheck the chapters. The story is confusing with various timelines and POV shifts.

Being with my so-called Kidnapper
aishad08

43/60

There are many grammatical errors in the book. The use of various fonts could be in a better way. The shifts in POV are confusing. The fonts on the cover are not clear.

Going once, Going twice, Going never
_shashi_

54/60

Amazing and Unique Concept!! I really liked it. Also, that cast idea was fabulous. Your book was overall very nice but if you would add a little more description that would add to its beauty. Also, just be a little more careful with commas, exclamatory signs, and so on.

Short Stories
CustardPanakesBursts

50.5/60

The overall concept of the book and plot of the story was really amazing and unique. I suggest you change the title to something creative and unique that would attract more readers. Same in the case of description. You should add content in your storybook description as it's really short.

Festered
DreamingBud

56.5/60

Marvellous !! By writing this book you have done an amazing job. It really conveys the feeling of people who have suffered from harassment and can truly relate to it. I would suggest you change the cover to something common for all genders as it's based on aspects of every gender. I would suggest you add content related to different sexualities as they also faced the same problems.

Rise of the Raven
Djxs17

52/60

As this book was a sequel to your first book, so in starting it was difficult to understand. For that, I would suggest that you add a chapter or part before the start of the story which explains the summary of the previous book and it would be easy for readers to read. The content and plot of the story were really amazing.

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Festered by DreamingBud

SECOND POSITION
Going Once, Going Twice, Going Never by _shashi_

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Rise of the Raven by Djxs17

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