Emma1791

Title

Sky

4/5

It is simple but it works. Have similar titles been done before? Yes but the old saying is if it ain't broke don't fix it, people like these type of titles and they catch their eye.

Cover

5/5

I love the cover. It is both beautiful and magical. Really appealing to the eye.

Summary

4/5

There are a couple of little bits that could be changed to make the flow smother. I'm going to point them out feel free to ignore/use what you feel applies or works for you

• Sky Volant has always had instead of Sky Volant had always had

• Ever since she arrived take away the had

• Just say Hogwarts, everyone reading already know it is Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry

• Sky is a incredibly hard girl not to notice, obsessed with the colour blue the young ravenclaw vows to wear as much as possible with the hope it will be her lucky charm.

• There is only one boy who doesn't notice her, the boy she wants to see her the most.

These are only small things and overall it is good summary.

Plot

5/5

For a brief moment I feared it might be end up being one of those cliché a girl loves Sirius fics but no, you have written it so beautifully that I didn't just believe that Sky was your character but it was like you had created the HP yourself. Seriously you write that good, with a an interesting and stable plot.

Readability

5/5

It flows much better in the story than the summary. You have great grammar and punctuation. You're really know how to captive a reader.