Prologue-That's all I'm doing for now. 

So, we are going to be reviewing........Fated... Hmmm catchy title

Looking at the description, I can tell it is the kind of storyline I like with my werewolf stories...ooh a devil?? Like a real devil? Or a bad boy?

"You stop right there!" He shouts, but I'm running faster and faster. "

"I stood up to run, but suddenly he grabbed me. "

"..It's past 12 in the night." Delete the mid "night". it's confusing. 12am is midnight. Or say it's a little after 12, midnight. Instead of "in the night".

oh. That's sad. Mommy and daddy are gone..

Think I might add this to my library. 

"When I was five, my dad, my mom, and I were having a picnic below a tree."

"Do you want ice cream, Scarlet?" And who is asking this?

"Scarlet. When my parents call me that, I feel precious to them."

whoa.....Not even gonna bother with grammar because-wow. That's horrific. Totally sad. Poor daddy..... >-