Review #1;@MaraLujan3
Soooo. This person is from Argentina, so my trusty friend, Google Translate, shall be helping me out here!
Book we will be reviewing is called;
Who said? That loving would be easy
Description; In truth, there are feelings that are better left in the Platonic, and it is better to remember them like that, unreal, unfinished, because that is what makes them perfect.
Emma did not think it was enough for someone to love her, and less so that the person who does it is the same one that she believes to be in love with since childhood. Erik, your hobby is spending every night with a different woman. What will happen if the heartbreaker looks at Emma ?. No one said that love was easy, but can they overcome all obstacles?
The title needs to have the question mark at the end of the title, not in the middle. Could be a google mistake, but oh well.
Sooooo. Here we GO!!
Page 1; Love the start. But the thoughts can be italicized and prepped up a little better. No period is needed after your other punctuations(!, ?, . , etc)
Before;
-Emma!- scream the nanny. - Where will this girl have gotten?-Said while looking. -Leo!, have you seen your sister?.
-Yes, he's in his room playing with Mateo.
After;
"Emma!" Screamed the nanny. Where could this girl have gone? He asked himself, while looking.
"Leo! Have you seen your sister?"
"Yes, she's in her room playing with Mateo." Leo replied.
Not sure rn, if Leo's sister is trans, but a sister is a girl, so she/her not he/his, unless they are trans, and well, ok then.. I'll find out later in the story. So far it seems like she is a girl, and thus being referenced as a girl by the nanny-whom I presume is a male.
That's horrible. Didn't even have time to come to their daughters birthday. What awful parents. Keep going.
Well yes, of course they were inseparable. She need a friend, and her parents weren't even there for her. Work ain't that important that you have to ignore your poor child.
Damn right men are more loyal than women. Women are catty.. Well girls are anyway. Trust me, I know. I deal with them everyday.
The only thing that is confusing is the way the sentences are organized. It could also be that my translate is mixing it up.
Page 2;
Okay. GIF tells me there's going to be a party. Possibly with liquor.
I presume the bold means that its in Emma's POV.
Love the use of emojis. Not everyday you see that.
I put on a black dress to the body.. OOOOhhh. Misplaced, but still a kinda funny mess up. Ominous.
Carmine color. Hmm. I'll have to check that out. Never seen it before. Suspicious alien colored activity.
Then again, I've only worn lipstick once and it looked like I ate someone, with red smears all over my mouth.
Ew. Dude, get a room with your mouth to mouth puh-lease. Just- never mind. Just keep the clothes on. All of them.
Ok, ya'll. That's review one. I'm not trying to criticize, just trying to help, with a mix of opinions.
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