DISCLAIMER: I am not, nor do I claim to be, a professional critique. This means I will not catch every mistake and if I say something you don't like or don't agree with, just let me know and maybe even give me tips on how to improve! :)

Author: afrid2002
Book: The Killer Hunt

Prologue:

This whole paragraph is wonderful. It reads so nicely, and I just wanted to point out that I loved the whole thing! This paragraph -and basically the whole prologue - pulls the reader in and makes them want to keep reading.

Just a suggestion, but this line seems as though it could be broken up into two separate sentences. It's beautiful, though I think it would be a lot nicer if you did do that. Also, instead of saying "blacken", try saying "blackened."

His sense of humor is a great way to show characterization in the beginning.

I just have a suggestion for re-wording the sentence. Maybe put it like this: "As he smiled and reached out for his pockets, the harsh rain continued to obliterate the crystal reflection of the sky, turning it into a disoriented chaos." As you can see, just a small part at the end :) I just added a comma to slow the reader down a little, but that's all that I think is needed for this part.

Chapter One:

I would say, "Chris Calloway - his partner - nodded." Or "Chris Calloway, his partner, nodded." It just makes it a bit smoother to read. :)

Shivers went up my spine while I read this! Great description - just... wow. Good job.

His cockiness is a great sense of characterization.

Chapter Two:

Just a suggestion, but maybe word it like this: "It churned within, hungry for destruction, and he knew it was too much for him to handle. The pressure of the raging sea of anger could force him into doing things he would later regret."

The next few suggestions are just small grammatical errors. *Eyes and *An open

"Both the detectives, unable to speak, kept quiet." Once again, just a comma to slow the readers down a little.

Grammatical error: *find

Just remember to close your dialogue. :)

Plot: 50/50 points
Originality: 30/30 points
Spelling/Errors: 25/20 points
Total: 95 points

Reasoning: I had no issues with the first two chapters of this book (the prologue and chapter one). They had close to no errors, and all I had to say was good things. Your writing is poetic, and just very good overall! It was lovely, to say the very least (and I will continue reading it!). I'd recommend this book to anyone who enjoys thrillers or mysteries - I liked it a lot, and that genre doesn't usually pique my interests! The only bad thing I have to say is in the latest chapter, there was a few spelling mistakes. Just make sure to slow down while writing to ensure that you don't make any little errors, but stuff like that happens to the best of us, so don't worry. :).

~@miranda47312