Author: @Ang_B_Writing

Reviewer: @SheWritesWonderss

Cover: 

I like the simplicity of your cover. Simple covers can really stand out from other books. When I first saw your book your cover left an impression, and I could easily associate your cover with your story because of the mark it left in my head! That is a really great thing because the more your story is someone's head, the more likely they will read your future chapters. 

I would suggest you make your subtitle a little larger/easier to read since I can't see it. Little tip on subtitles would be to choose something that is 3-6 words since short subtitles is another tool for memory readers use. 

"That's the book with a mysterious subtitle. Let's go see what this story is about!"

Description: 

Your description is concise and lays out the story nicely. However, I would spice things up a little! Use some descriptive words! Describe Sam a little more! Does she have vibrant red hair? Maybe her cheeks are always a rosy pink!

Since your book can fit in the mystery genre, I would give more than one question for your reader's to find out in your story. Yes, I am intrigued to find out why "...something just doesn't add up..." but at the same time I want more things to captivate me to read your story! Adding sub plots can give you more questions to present in your description, AND it makes your story even more appealing.

To Improve: 

You could have been alot more descriptive. Especially with Allison. She's a rich girl, why not make the reader "see" all of her glitz and glamour? Describe her jewelry or her perfect outfits that cost more than my house. 

After reading your epilouge, I am satisfied with the ending, but it did fall into a bit of a cliché. Not saying that having a story that is like that is a bad thing, it just doesn't make it pop! Maybe change the outcome of one of the characters? Leaving the readers somewhat dissatisfied sticks with them. It makes your story more believable too! 

Grammar/Spelling/Sentence Construction: 

You have minor grammatical errors throughout your story. Most of the tike your forgot to put commas. You made some grammar errors in your description too. I suggest grammarly, since it is a great application that will catch those mistakes. 

If you don't want to download grammarly, then hemingway editor (free to use without download) is a great choice. It catches grammar and tense mistakes. It even points out sentences that are difficult to read! It's got plenty of feature that I think would help take your story to next level!

Diction: 

Your word choice was a little redundant when you went to describe something. If you press control + f you can type in the words that are usually considered filler words and look to see if you overuse them in your writing. Here is a link to a list of words to avoid: https://www.grammarcheck.net/filler-words/

Compliments:

Your plot was creative, heartwrenching, and shocking all at once! Loved it!

The mystery aspect of it kept the story rolling!

Overview: 

REMEMBER ME is a mystery/teen fiction novel filled to the brim in drama and suspense. It is completed, so you can go right now amd read all 21 chapters!