AUTHOR: @Bellarke

REVIEWER: Luna_Vaethenee

Hi! I'm going to start with I LOVE YOUR BOOK!!! It's so relatable and nice to read. Honestly I thought this was a fanfic so I wouldn't understand anything but that's not true.

Cover, simple as that. Of course, simple is sweet sometimes, but the reason covers are there is to give people an image how your story will be like. For example, if the book is about werewolves, the cover might have something to do with werewolves.

Your summary was a little too short. It is only one sentence. Summaries are there to give the readers a hint on how the story will go. So when I read your summary, I only knew this was a story of two people in love.

What about your plot? Well, it's development is kind of slow but slow and steady wins the race right? 😉This isn't a major problem but the readers might get bored reading 'filler chapters'.

Your grammar is fine. I think you'll recheck your work before publishing it. That's good! Because sometimes the devil (auto-correct ) will change what you write. So no problem here.

Vocabulary. Yours is just nice, but does need some expending. You're never too old to learn, people say. The only way to expand vocabulary is to read. Novels, books or even magazines. Anything with English written in it can improve your vocab and writing.

Now, your sentence structure is nice. You bold the dialogues of the characters and write the rest normally. That's a good idea but it has its ups and downs. When I read your book, I noticed that it's full of dialogues. A good book needs a third point of view thing... You know? Explain the weather, the emotions or probably whatever incident happened in the book. Then only can one see the general image of the story.

The originality of your book is 50/50. It is a fanfic after all. I don't have much to say about the rest though since I've mentioned how slow your story goes.

Lust is a wonderful book. I see the masterpiece. You just need to adjust things like your cover and summary to be noticed.