(R24 is short for Review 24)

REVIEW : Book24 (Fantasy)
BOOK TITLE: Water Stirs
AUTHOR: Ja2Anjelica

NOTE :
--This is my personal analysis with the present contents of book and the mentioned judging criteria. It may change after author edits the book or if criteria is changed.
--Any other person judging the same book, on same criteria/points, may hold different opinions/comments/suggestion/advice than highlighted here.
--Nothing is written/criticized to offend anyone. If you don't agree, it's alright, I don't mind others having different opinions.

REVIEW :

1. Cover, Title, Summary (9/10)
Cover is very well made and eye catching. The image of the mermaid is attractive and suits the title, summary and the theme of the story too.
Title is good and supports the storyline of prisons made underneath the sea waters. The title's font type, size and formatting is good on the book cover.
Summary is very well written and the excerpts from various parts of the book in three paragraphs made it interesting, creating the necessary suspense for the readers. The first paragraph describing the mermaids is especially enticing. However there are some Grammar and word mistakes (eg- pass, in place of past) need to be removed.

2. Images/photos etc., audio, video, GIFs- Graphics (2/10)
Apart from the cover image, no graphics are used.
I don't judge any book based on graphics and my personal opinion doesn't take graphics into account. But, it sure does go e an extra effect on readers (if used moderately and relevantly).

3. Grammar, Spelling, vocabulary (4/10).
I am afraid there are many mistakes, in most of the fields.
Spelling mistakes- a few, not many.
Grammar: Punctuation - comma, single and double quotation marks mistakes, apostrophe, exclamation marks, period mistakes at some places.
Usage of verbs and verb tense mistakes are present too in a large number. With careful scrutiny these can be edited.
The relative clauses (defining as well as non defining clauses), need attention too, to convey the proper sentence meaning to the reader.
Word mistakes - a few, but those are typos (the reason may be hurried typing etc. In my  case it's  the simultaneous dictionary corrections, which remain as errors afterwards).
Word repetitions are also many and they can be minimized by either using appropriate synonyms or reframing the sentence. In some places, words are repeated twice or thrice in the same sentence, I would suggest to avoid that.
At a few places the selection of words for nouns, adverbs and adjectives may be modified for conveying it's proper meaning.
Sentence formation mistakes are present too, in a large number and can be reduced by editing (I have highlighted one, in your book, as an inline comment.)
Vocabulary is satisfactory and conveys the meaning to the readers.

4. Literary elements: plot, setting, characterization, conflicts, POVs, mood, tone (7/10)
The plot is appropriate for a fantasy story with the many supernatural creatures and their abilities. But the environment created by author needs improvement, in terms of addition of some information in the starting 5 chapters (rest I haven't studied, so I can't say).
The book language is very well maintained to acquaint the reader with all the characters of the story. But the description is lacking and many things are left unexplained. Though I understand that it's not easy to incorporate all the details in so  No unnecessary details are added and that adds to the beauty of the book.
Settings (meaning living environment, clothing, conversation styles, food habits, etc.) are satisfactory but need some more details at some places. The time and place of the story is also not mentioned in the book. 
Character development is satisfactory.
The conflicts of the story are good but need proper expression.
The book is written in first person POV and is expressed well.
Moods (emotions aroused in reader)- mysterious, fascinating.
Tones (author's attitude)- intriguing, hurried, less-explanatory.
The POV and tones are good, some improvement is needed for upgrading moods and tones.

5. Diction, writing style, pacing (7/10)
Diction means the choice of words (nouns, adjectives, adverbs etc) for the narrative, as per the genre and subject. Diction needs attention at some parts.
Writing style is first person narrative which is done very well (formal as well as informal tones used, wherever needed).
Pacing is moderate and reader has no problem keeping up with the story progress as the new twists unfold.

6. Allusion, epigraphs, euphemism, foreshadowing, metaphors/simile, imagery, other literary devices (3/10)
Foreshadowing is used in some chapters. 
Author has attempted to use imagery but it needs more polishing.
Other devices not used. 

7. Structuring (8/10)
Text structuring-Starting and ending of chapters clearly presented in text. Paragraphs, dialogues are satisfactorily structured. However, at more than a few places, the dialogues are mixed up with the story narration in a non pleasing way. The dialogues spoken by two or more than two characters must not be in the same paragraph (it could be solved by adding spaces/lines between them, accordingly)
Book structuring-Chapters are numbered sequentially. It's easier for a reader to memorize the chapter number at which he/she left, to continue reading later (but the same doesn't go with chapter names).
Prologue isn't present and it's not necessarily required. Author's notes are inserted between chapters but properly managed. The contents/index is maintained systematically (though chapter names aren't present).

8. Cliffhangers, twists/turns/incident presentation (8/10)
Cliffhangers are good and present in some chapters. The storyline is however good and compensates for their absence too since the readers continuously want to know more about the girl who was taken away by mermaids in the water prisons. The readers are constantly nagged by the strange behavior of the girl and what actually happened to her.
Many scenes need elaboration since they are just spoken in dialogues but readers want to know more.
The truths about the girl are uncovered gradually one by one and all the characters are made to involve with the investigation very meticulously. No character is left unattended even when new characters are introduced.
Twists and turns are not many and author has really done a good work by presenting very limited information in each chapter, still making it seem a lot of information and keeping the readers intrigued simultaneously.
The presentation of all the happenings is done effectively and interestingly.

9. Originality, creativity (5/10)
The concept of mermaids and other supernatural creatures isn't new, but yes the idea of water prisons (stirs) sounds very creative (not new  but the presentation of the story is different and thus seems interesting).

Rating/Marks :
9+2+4+7+7+3+8+8+5= 53/90

Reviewer's comments:
I liked the story and the concept of water prisons very much.

Reviewer's note (to readers) :
It is a fantasy story about many supernatural creatures taken together in one place. However the prominent ones are the water creatures (mermaids, mermen etc).
Readers who love fantasy will surely love the book.

ADVICE (to author):

I mentioned some of the suggestions in the above text. I have only two suggestions to you, otherwise the book is good.

To take the advice or not is at your discretion however, my suggestions are listed below :

1) There are grammatical and sentence formation mistakes. You may reframe some sentences.

2) At many places details (settings) and necessary descriptions may be incorporated for better imagery.

If there is anything you don't understand, let me know, as an inline comment here. I will surely explain, if I find time for it.

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