(R16 is short for Review 16)

REVIEW: Book16 (Fantasy)
BOOK TITLE: Conquer
AUTHOR: Nlght_lock

NOTE :
--This is my personal analysis, with the present contents of book, and the mentioned judging criteria. It may change after author edits the book or if criteria is changed.
--Any other person judging the same book, on same criteria/points, may hold different opinions/comments/suggestion/advice, than highlighted here.
--Nothing is written/criticized to offend anyone. If you don't agree, it's alright, I don't mind others having different opinions.

REVIEW :

1. Cover, Title, Summary (4/10)
Cover image pertains to the magical land, and the tallest tree on which the lead character, Frid, climbs and sits, to view everything around, to feel free. But, the cover image is slightly gloomy and if the theme of book, is based on dark magic, then it's fine. Otherwise, make the colors bright rather than towards black side.
The title may be changed (Read Advice Section).
Summary needs improvement, as grammatical and sentence formation mistakes are present. Spacing is unevenly used and needs to be utilized properly, to sort out the content priority-wise.

2. Images/photos etc., audio, video, GIFs- Graphics (2/10)
Images- cover photo is the only image used. None other graphics used.
Though, I don't judge any story based on the presence of graphics, but it sure does entice a reader to further delve in the book. I understand that it takes time for incorporating such features (especially in a fantasy book, having it's own strange, different world). I never suggest authors, to improve on graphics, because I believe, it is not important, if your content/text has a good imagery. But, on Wattpad, it has certain benefits.

3. Grammar, Spelling, vocabulary (3/10)
I am afraid there are many mistakes in this section.
Spelling mistakes- many, the characters' names are also spelled wrong, at many places (eg- Fried, Bardfist, Barfist etc.), which doesn't lend a good impression. I know that these are typos (due to hurried writing, automatic dictionary corrections etc.), but writing brings with it, the efforts of continuous and gradual editing (and all writers do that).
Grammar: Punctuation - comma, single & double quotation marks mistakes, exclamation marks, period placement, verbs usage and verb tenses at many places. At many points, present and past tenses are mixed, in the same paragraph. Try to avoid it, as it confuses the reader.
Word mistakes - couldn't spot any.
Word repetitions- minimal and don't hinder the reading flow.
Vocabulary is good and appropriate for acquainting the reader well with the details, incidents, characters and story progression and the fantasy world.
Some words are missing in between sentences, which can be covered up slowly.
Sentence formation mistakes are also present in all chapters. Some longer sentences can be divided into two, otherwise may be used with proper punctuation (comma, semi-colon, etc).

4. Literary elements: plot, setting, characterization, conflicts, POVs, mood, tone (9/10)
The plot is magical, it's environment is chosen appropriately and will attract readers who love fantasy. The plot includes many mystical beings whose names and peculiar features are devised by the author like, rabbitbasher, verdantwings etc. I believe background information, in prologue, should be elaborated, to build interest.
The time when the story takes place (history eg. 1800s, or present or future time) and the place must be clearly mentioned.
Settings (meaning living environment, clothing, conversation styles, food habits, transportation, communication means if any, etc., as per the time & place cited in story) need elucidation too.
Characters are developed very well gradually with their magical abilities & behavioral patterns unfolded slowly, as the chapters progress. Their thoughts, feelings, concerns etc., are relevantly included, whenever and wherever required.
Conflicts are properly woven with the story.
The book is written in third person POV, and author wrote with the right mixture of tones and moods.
Moods (these are the emotions aroused in the reader by the write up) induced- amusing, enthralling, exploratory. Tones (meaning author's attitude)- preternatural, whimsical, exciting and explorative. In short, POV, moods, tones are effectively presented.

5. Diction, writing style, pacing (8/10)
Diction is good, with a nice & fitting choice of words, but at some places sentence formation mistakes, make it hard for the reader, to grasp the story flow (mostly in later chapters).
Writing style is narrative ( formal and informal both used, as per requirement), with the adequate amount of descriptive tone. No description seems to be extra or irrelevant. Pacing is very well balanced with the events, incidents, characters' arc development and the various conflicts.

6. Allusion, epigraphs, euphemism, foreshadowing, metaphors/simile, imagery (6/10)
Foreshadowing is properly used throughout book chapters. The author divulges little information, with each chapter which, while satiating readers' curiosity, keeps him bound for continuing to the next chapter.
The imagery of the book still need refinement, in all the chapters.
Other devices not used, which may be due to the story requirements.

7. Structuring (8/10)
Starting & ending clearly presented in chapters, as well as text. Paragraphs, dialogues are properly structured. Chapters names are precisely chosen according to the content. All chapters are sequentially numbered, which is professional, as well as convenient for a reader. Structuring of book sections is also satisfactory. Prologue proves to be the book's strength, as the plot background gives much needed spice, but it still needs addition of some information and removal of oblivious information. It would be good if you please mention, the name of the person, in whose POV Prologue is written (and don't forget to relate him, in the story chapters). Or you can make it an omniscient voice, to not make it out of place.

8. Cliffhangers, twists/turns/incident presentation (7/10)
Cliffhangers are maintained throughout Chapters.
The storyline is intriguing & engaging.
Twists and turns are however, lesser and their presentation too is slightly less interesting. You may describe things precisely, while omitting the redundant text.

9. Originality, creativity (8/10)
Many magical elements are combined together in the book, and there are many magical beings like rabbitbasher, verdantwings, night flower, etc, which possess strange new abilities. Though everything or the whole plot can't be said original ; still, the linking of all these beings, with the characters, the fantasy world and the storyline, is done very creatively, with a slight tone of originality.
The names and the striking features of all the beings and places, are devised by the author (other than humans). The magical abilities of human beings are also slightly different, and are revealed gradually. That's very interesting and original.

Rating/Marks :
4+2+3+9+8+6+8+7+8= 55/90

Reviewer's note (to readers):
The story is intriguingly put, and is spun around a new magical world, the readers would love to dive in. Every chapter has some new revelation and is a relish to read. The magical world has some magical creatures too, who have some new peculiar abilities, not heard of, which adds to the spice.

ADVICE (to author):

To take the suggestion or not, is at author's discretion, but my suggestions are listed below :

1) My opinion is, to modify the Summary section, as it's slightly obscure to grasp, for the reader. You must give a reader one or more interesting fact(s) about the fantasy world, while concealing all other information. Eg.-
perhaps you can define the terms, caged or conquered; name of the fantasy world, with it's striking features, etc.

2) A section may include the names of characters (and any description you may wish to reveal to the readers, other than their abilities which you disclose gradually, in later chapters). It may also highlight the meaning/significance of some story specific terms, which are framed by you, and thus, not found in the dictionary (like rabbitbashers, verdantwings, night flower, etc.), to better acquaint the readers.

3) Although the descriptions of the magical creatures (rabbitbasher, verdantwings, night flower) and the training area are vivid; still there are other parts of the magic world, you created which need proper imagery. You may improve it, if you would like, (as such a book which has so many elements woven together, needs proper visualization of the magical world developed).

4) Title- 'Conquer', is a verb. A title, is the book's recognition, and you may use verbs, adjectives etc. with nouns, to make it meaningful. You may use a phrase/sentence too, as book title (sensibly). But, a stand-alone verb doesn't make any sense to me (the advice/opinion may change from person to person). You may check some useful websites for guidance on 'how to choose the book title.'

If there is anything you don't understand, let me know, as an inline comment. I will surely explain, if I find time for it.