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    For most of you who didn't know I'm onma gap year and lemme tell you it sucks never do that like ever ever I'm so bored and now she's going 😭.

     I'm gonna go mia again 😭 (I'm kidding)
Oh and I have the nastiest flu like ever I hate my self rn and I look like shit yes I said it I look like shit
    But like I'm always going to say I'm gonna stop yapping although I know you all love when I yap anyway thank you all for 1k views on the very first chapter on this review shop 💕💕you all made my day fr

Yes it's currently November 23rd posting this whenever 😗

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Author:Tea-pots

Genre: Fantasy

Status: Ongoing

My thoughts:

So first off great way to start a chapter I know you said you wanted to write something that isn't in the European setting but some of your characters name is kinda hard to pronounce not saying it's a problem but for us who don't know how to pronounce it could we get like a more simple name 😭❤️
     It you don't change it that's totally fine because yeah.
    

Also we need to work on spacing I feel like I say this on every review but I think it's necessary so your words don't look clustered and confusing.
    Your chapters seem to be short how many words do you have per chapter ??

Oh and your punctuations need to be checked on some paragraphs some punctuations weren't needed and in some places where they where needed they went mia.
   Well your book description seems to be quite good your book cover for me really stood out and that makes it perfect.
   The description I don't know I feel like it needs so little little spice you could maybe put out some little snippet from a chapter on there with the current description and I'm sure it would be just perfect.

Oh and the "Spirit lady" wouldn't it be nice to give her a name or does she already have one.

I think my main concern is your spacing,also with the names most readers might loose interest yes it's inspired by the Zulu culture but I think there can be easier names we could try right 🤔
      Oh and your chapter length your book looks like it can have a lot of potential but with the length maybe combine two chapters ?

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