@hellocheeky

prologue

It begins on an interesting note, and immediately engages the reader. However, in the middle, it gets boring and even the fight scene cannot be pictured clearly. Have you heard of write your chapter, leave it for two days and then come back again? Your mind always catches the errors that you made before and gives you pointers on how to make it better.

Also, the few paragraphs leading to the end are a bit unclear. Maybe you could explain the thoughts and the things that are happening a little more clearly : )

chapter one

Okay so this was definitely well written than the prologue. It should've been the opposite. Maybe you could try shifting the point of view from third person?

Now the first paragraph here is a bit random. Infact, this chapter has a lot of information that was handed at random. Maybe you could try slowing things down and incorporating more details like the backstory, maybe flashbacks?

Overall

I think you just need to focus on adding more details to you chapters and maybe shortening the length, and you will have a great story.