Reviewer: colorisreader
Author: rinaXhazurina

Review: 

Strengths:

Intriguing Style: Your story has a captivating writing style that grabs attention.

Solid Plot and Theme: The core concept and message you're trying to convey are strong and unique.

Areas for Improvement:

Pacing: The story starts too intensely, potentially overwhelming readers. Consider a slower introduction that builds suspense gradually.

Character Development: A proper introduction and build-up for the characters are missing. Readers need time to connect and empathize with them.

World Building: Information about the world you've created is dumped all at once, making it difficult to understand.

Suggestions:

Start Slower: Begin with a scene that eases readers into the world and introduces them to the characters in a more natural way.

Character Connection: Show, don't tell. Let the characters' actions and dialogue reveal their personalities and motivations.

Gradual World Introduction: Instead of overwhelming readers with details, sprinkle information about the world throughout the story.

By following these suggestions, you can maintain your captivating style while creating a more engaging experience for your readers. They'll have time to connect with the characters, understand the world, and become invested in the story's suspense.


Hope you like the review! 

With love, 
Stephanie & The Writer's Hub Team