Originality: 10/10

Spelling Grammar: 10/10

Character Development: 10/10

Overall Quallity: 10/10

My Opinion:

Such a masterpiece. I love the way you used the power of description. It made me feel like I was there in the book.

It feels pretty original to me, so I enjoyed it. Very good job on the spelling and grammar. I didn't really see any mistakes from some pet peeves of mine.

One example:

I would recommend after "demand" to place a comma to separate a thought. It is just my suggestion.

Either than that, good character development and everything else too.

(I apologize for the short review, but it's because you didn't have many issues with the story.)

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