Originality: 10/10

Spelling and Grammar: 9.3/10

Character Development: 10/10

Overall Quality: 10/10

Opinion:

So far, so good. Even though I don't normally read fanfictions, this was pretty good.

I enjoyed how you developed Beyonce's personality through the way how she talks and interacts with her boss, friend, and the doctor. I thought you used those characters well as a support to her personality without leaving their own character development behind.

For the spelling and grammar, I did notice some problems.

For example:

One thing that needs to be fixed here is the "Goodmorning." "Good morning" is two words, so there needs to be a space. This can be tricky. I also remember the time that I used to wonder if it was one word or two. That's why, when in doubt, ask the internet.

The second mistake is this:

After "banking services," I would recommend putting a period rather than a comma. The comma in that sentence is splitting two complete clauses that make this sentence into a comma splice. A way to fix it is to put either a period, semi-colon, or a "comma + and." I would recommend either putting a period or a comma splice to fix it.

I did also notice some other comma splices in your story, but I'll leave that up to you, author. A great way to find them is to read each sentence and then ask yourself if a comma is splitting two complete sentences. If yes, fix it. If not, then you are good.

The third mistake I found was this:

Since "itd" is not a word and rather a contraction of "it" and "would," what it needs is an apostrophe. So, instead of "itd," it is more grammatically correct as "it'd."

The last mistake I saw was this:

Instead of "Ofcourse," it should be "Of course." This is because it is two words rather than one.

So far, I really enjoyed it. I think it has a good plot. I would just recommend maybe rereading your story for some grammatical mistakes and spelling errors just in case, or you can ask someone else to help revise it. As my motto goes, "You are quick to find other's mistakes rather than your own."

If you need spelling help, I would recommend using Grammarly. Although it glitches almost all the time, it does help with spelling. I just wouldn't recommend relying heavily on it since it doesn't always know what you are trying to write.

Thank you for waiting patiently for your review as I was also trying to get better with my health.

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