Originality: 10/10

Spelling and Grammar: 9.3/10

Character Development: 10/10

Overall Quality: 10/10

Opinion:

I have enjoyed it so far. It was interesting to see Tyson's character develop through his interaction with the chief of police and the girls at the *cough* special club. Those interactions really helped develop his character.

I would say it was pretty original so far judging from most detective novels. The way you started it off shocked me (lol).

For the spelling and grammar, I did notice some mistakes. For example, I did notice some run-on sentences. I did mention about that in the chapter prior that a comma before an "and" can make a run-on sentence become a compound sentence.

Here's an example of a run-on:

You brought me to the store and I bought milk.

A good way to fix this is by adding a comma before the "and":

You brought me to the store, and I bought milk.

This is a common problem for most people and me too. So don't worry! A lot of practice helps!

Another thing I noticed was a slight misuse of vocabulary. You used the word hear instead of here in a sentence, but someone else mentioned that already mentioned that in your comment section.

I would say all in all it was a good read and can't wait to see how it comes along!

Also before I recommend this story, you should be at least 18 to read the story since it is pretty mature. So, 18+, feel free to check out the story by Egwuji