Genre: Teen Fiction

Summary: It was just an average day at school, except it wasn't. When Grace's school has a blackout, so does the entire city. The only difference after the lights come back about an hour later is that the only people in the city left are the people inside the school, everyone else is gone. The only exception is the unknown voice that fills the speakers in the school instructing and informing everyone about the current social experiment that they are all currently in. Grace, Alex, Maria, and Jason are grouped together and find themselves in not only a social experiment, but also a killing spree, and they're the prey.

+ Cover

It is simple and nice. I don't see any problem with it though given the story, only girl seems a bit inappropriate. Maybe a group looking scared?

Rating: 7.5/10

+ Title

To be honest, this sounds more like the title of a horror story. Like a paranormal one. But this is merely about a weird experiment- kind of like Saw. So I will suggest thinking of something better.

Rating: 6.5/10

+ Summary

The only problem I have with the summary is its first line. It's a bit too... awkward sounding. Change that and you are good to go.

Rating: 8/10

+ Plot

It isn't an unheard plot yet you can take it many different ways.

Rating: 7/10

+ Characters

Your MC, Grace seems to be the logical one. I quite like her character since she seems to be putting her facts and logic in front of her
emotions- most of the time at least. But then she annoyed e when in the hospital she said 'No one is here'. I mean didn't they see any horror movies??

I don't like Maria much. The first thing being she left behind Grace while she rushed out of the gym. I mean she didn't even look back or anything. So that doesn't endear me to her.

The other two boys aren't delved into too deep but I feel like Grace stereotypes them too fast without getting a chance to know them.

Rating: 7/10

+ Chapters

They are very good length as well as interesting. But as the story goes on it keeps on lengthening. Try to keep it short.

Of course, the part after the black out is a bit confusing since it was hard to know how Grace knew that everyone was knocked out while she couldn't see anything. Of course, she can assume but she will most probably ask Alex to check what happen then to directly ask him to check their pulse.

Were she and Alex the only one to think about other exits? It kind of seems unlikely but for the sake of the plot I guess we can let it go.

Oh, and the way they talk about their families is a bit apathetic. Like they should be a bit more worried about their loved ones right?

You mixed up your and you're in some places.

Separate paragraphs whenever someone else speaks a dialogue instead of clumping it up together.

There are a few spelling mistakes so I would recommend that you proofread it before posting it.

I would also recommend that you edit the later chapters since they seemed to be a bit rushed and hard to understand. Especially the part about the doctor and Alex.

You have a great story here that is capable of creeping people out if written properly. Edit it and I am sure that it would be an amazing read.

+ Conclusion

A very creepy kind if stories that have abandoned hospitals and creepy doctors so yes, it is creepy and a good read overall.

+ Overall Rating

7/10

+ Overall Rating