Genre: Teen Fiction

Summary: One dream.

One promise.

One choice.

Promises are meant to be kept, right?

Ever since Skyler Davison was young, she aspired to be a singer, just like her mother. "Lose your dreams, lose your mind" is her motto that she follows religiously.

Although this is so, obstacles have been a daily occurrence in her life. No matter what, this has never stopped her. Never will she give up her ambitions because of what life throws at her. Skyler fights to go for her ambition, despite the consequences this may have.

One fateful day may change just this.

Will she jeopardise a relationship for a promise she makes that day, or will she sacrifice her dreams to keep exactly that?

+ Cover

I like it but the subtitle seems to crowd the picture a bit too much. If you can remove it then it would look a whole lot better.

Rating: 7/10

+ Title

I like it. It's unique.

Rating: 8/10

+ Summary

Nicely put. Gives enough insight into the story without giving anything much away.

Rating: 8/10

+ Plot

Not one I have seen before.

Rating: 8/10

+ Characters

Skylar: (Note that this is a personal opinion) I don't like her. She irritates me. I don't really know why but she does. Maybe I don't like overly serious characters and prefer a bit of humour.

Not really sure of the reason but yeah, not my favourite character.

I liked the fact that you did not make the typical 'daddy ignored her after mommy died' situation. It is so overused.

Their interactions are sweet and relatable.

I didn't read far ahead to actually know the other characters so I can't give my opinion on them.

Rating: 7/10

+ Chapters

Length: A bit too long than what I like.

Grammar, sentence structure: They were nice to read.

General:

So, this was a different start that how I imagined it would be. Though I have to commend you that you didn't start from when she is already grown up and show this part as a flashback. It provides more realism
to the story when you put this in present.

To be honest, I found the first part of the chapter little boring.

Yes, I agree with and like most of the things your character said but I feel most of it was unnecessary. I am not a big fan of lengthy
chapters so that was a tiny bit put offing. I understand the necessity of it though I still find a whole lot unnecessary things in the
beginning

A monologue wouldn't have captured my attention if I was reading it normally.

Your MC doesn't seem to be 12 years old in the beginning of the story with the way she talks but as the chapter progresses, she seemed to fit into the role.

That being said, I loved the interactions between the characters. It was very cute.

But at the same time, I couldn't' find myself to imagine them. I could imagine the interactions but the characters themselves were a bit robotic. I could sympathize but not empathize I guess.

Why did she start crying suddenly? I mean she didn't understand what was going on, so why did she cry? It just seems a bit out of place reaction to me.

And it would be great if you could describe how the venue was. It would give the readers more idea about how famous her mother was.

In the second chapter, you say people escape from agony. What? That doesn't make a lot of sense.

The part where she says I am being ridiculous sounds unrealistic for
her age. You have to keep in mind that she is young. While most of the dialouges reflect that, there are a few that belies that.

Grabbing her mother's shoulders and shaking it is an extreme reaction since she doesn't know that she's dead for sure. I really doubt that she would do it. Of course, you know her better than I do but it still sounds a little bit extreme to me.

Oh, and did the doctors know she is dead when they sent her to see her? Because they just enter the room and announce her dead.

This all being said, I liked the story. The writing is beautiful and I like the fact that you give so much attention to details.

The only thing is the robotic feel of the chapter. You are telling not showing. You should put in the details of how the characters are feeling and how hey respond to certain situations. By putting in small details like those, you an enhance your writing.

+ Conclusion

Beautiful piece of story and very well worth the read.

+ Overall Rating

8/10